The Kaleidoscope

Posted: September 24, 2014 in Uncategorized

Copyright - Marie Gail Stratford

Hungry, dirty, and scared, David huddled in the attic corner, wincing each time an explosion rocked the earth.
“If we don’t return,” Father had said, “look inside the kaleidoscope.”
David had. Bits of glass, beads and pebbles whirled inside – reflecting off the mirrors.
“I’m going blind, looking inside the kaleidoscope.”
What was he supposed to find? Who knew?
What he wanted – water and a hunk of cheese.
The eye piece felt cold against his skin.
Yellows and reds were the predominant colors. Some blue. Lots of boring white.
David shattered the kaleidoscope against the wall.
Seven perfect diamonds spilled across the floor.

  1. Sandra says:

    That picture does remind me of a kaleidoscope, now that you mention it. Well observed.


  2. I think the boring white is exactly what we needed.


  3. A woman might not have been as violently frustrated and simply left it lay.


  4. Adam Ickes says:

    Who knew the father was being quite literal when he said to look into the kaleidoscope? Very interesting.


  5. Good job, but I wonder whether there will be anywhere for him to change the diamonds into something more useful.



  6. So David has the family’s jewels now so to speak…
    good flash story. Randy


  7. Elizabeth says:

    I want this kaleidoscope!


  8. Clever use of the prompt. What a great find for David. Hope the stones get him out of trouble. The father has obviously not got this far, as I read it?


  9. A really nice take on the prompt.


  10. draliman says:

    Not so boring white after all! that’ll buy a lot of cheese 🙂


  11. Dear Alicia,

    The diamonds won’t do much good if he dies in the explosion but I sense more to the story than that. What a clever place to hide jewels. 😉 Intriguing take on the prompt.




  12. dmmacilroy says:

    Dear Alicia,

    A perfect tale about a good father and an impatient son. Take the comma from the third sentence and place it after the word ‘scared’ in the first sentence and your housekeeping swill be done. Very well imagined.




  13. K.Z. says:

    a kaleidoscope + treasure! delightful take on the prompt 🙂


  14. Sightsnbytes says:

    nice. The thing does look like a kaleidoscope…never seen it at first, but now that’s all I see


  15. margirene says:

    Diamonds are just perfect to hide in a kaleidoscope. A clever idea. And I like how economically you’ve shown David’s situation and state of mind.

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  16. Exquisitely done! Now that you write about it, I see it as a kaleidoscope. Of course!
    I love the fact that the protagonist would like water and a hunk of cheese, and instead finds “seven perfect diamonds.”


  17. Alicia, I think the father knew his son well. He probably knew he’d break the kaleidoscope in frustration and find the diamonds. Creative use of the prompt. Well written. 🙂 —Susan

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  18. Amy Reese says:

    The kaleidoscope works well. Great imagination, Alicia. Lucky him to score the treasure. All that looking was worth it.


  19. hafong says:

    Good thing he felt frustrated. Otherwise he might not have found the diamonds.



  20. What a complex story in so few words. Amazing.


  21. Love this story…I too saw this as a kaleidoscope


  22. wmqcolby says:

    Oh, WAY cool! I want to hear more and yet, it stands alone, too.
    Alicia, this was “top shelf where grandma keeps the cookies!” 😉


    • That’s exactly, well almost, where my grandmother kept her cookies. On top of the refrigerator where small hands and short legs couldn’t reach. Thanks for such a glowing comment. Cheers!


  23. rgayer55 says:

    Well done, Alicia. This would a great opening for a much longer piece.


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