Lucky

Posted: November 19, 2014 in Friday Fictioneers
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Claire Fuller (7)

This is a continuation of last week’s story One Way Ticket. I figured Zelda-Rae needed a happy ending. Thanks for reading!

Jonathon had worked at Mr. Tom’s repair shop for ten years.
Ten solid years of, “Yes, sir,” and “No, sir,” and “It’ll be done soon.”
Well no more. He had a wife and a child now.
Zelda-Rae, the prettiest girl in Hollywood.
Found her homeless and pregnant and sad. Took her home.
Claimed that baby as his own. Yes, sirree, cute little thing.
They’d named her Lucky. And she was, too, ’cause now they
were buying Mr. Tom’s repair shop and turning it into a
bistro. Zelda-Rae was learning to read and write,
but those things weren’t as important as the way she could cook.

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Comments
  1. Sandra says:

    Well spotted! I debated on centering the story around the little poster on the door. Nice one, and a happy ending too.

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  2. I love the tone of voice in this one. I think that repair shop might take some work to turn it into a bistro!
    Claire

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  3. You have me smiling. Having the right priorities and love in your life is a blessing!

    janet

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  4. Well, aren’t they all lucky, a child, a new bistro, and wife that can cook.
    Whoo-ey!

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  5. J says:

    Hooray for Zelda-Rae! If only there were more Jonathon’s in life …!

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  6. dmmacilroy says:

    Dear Alicia,

    He has an eye for talent through it all. A very sweet story and a good use of one of the fine details of the prompt. Well done.

    Aloha,

    Doug

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  7. draliman says:

    Well done for rescuing Zelda-Rae! Sounds like she’ll a star at the bistro with her cooking (though it’s going to take some work to refurbish that workshop!).

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  8. It’s great to have a vision. Cute story.

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  9. plaridel says:

    lovely. it was a happy ending for sure.

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  10. rgayer55 says:

    Ah . . a fairy tale ending. He is indeed a prince charming. This has all the touches of something from the Hallmark channel. I have a feeling they have the determination and grit to make the bistro work.

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  11. Hallmark! Who knew? Maybe I can get a job! Thanks and Happy Thanksgiving. I’ll be gone next week.

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  12. Maree Gallop says:

    Nice story and you achieved the happy ending.

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  13. I like happy endings too 🙂

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  14. wildbilbo says:

    …I liked this, but I think I’ll choose to mentally keep it separate from the story last week.

    I really liked that sad ending last week, it had a lot of punch.

    Cheers
    KT

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  15. That’s a nice uplifting and positive story (See, I can recognize one!) Go Zelda-Ray and Jonathan!

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  16. Dear Alicia,

    Thanks for giving Zelda-Rae and her baby a happy ending. I agree with Russell. It would make a sweet Hallmark movie (one of my guilty pleasures 😉 ) Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  17. Great story of the rewards of hard work and generosity. Bravo. And, yes, cooking is more important that literacy.

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  18. So good to get a real and realistic good end.. and The bistro will be a brilliant success.

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  19. I’m so glad to see that Zelda Rae finds a happy ending, Alicia! You tied this in seamlessly. Thanks for adding a happy twist. 😀

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  20. Sarah Ann says:

    Hooray for happy endings. I doubt Zelda Rae imagined her cooking would be her ticket out of the gutter when she got on the bus last week. And thank heavens for the Jonathans of the world.

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  21. Alicia, Lovely story with a great happy ending. It worked out well for everyone. Well written. 🙂 — Susan

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  22. Good job wrapping up the story a happy ending.

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  23. Thanks! Glad you liked it. Happy Thanksgiving!

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  24. Both stories stand alone and work together. I would say that is quite an achievement .

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