Heart Song (Hjerte Sang)

Posted: December 24, 2014 in Uncategorized

PHOTO PROMPT - Copyright -Björn Rudberg

Ten years ago Britt kissed Bjorn on the rocky steps
built above the stone wall overlooking Sognefjord.
Oh, that kiss! Warm – in spite of the crystalline spray rising
from the wind-churned waters twenty feet below.
Air vibrating with the calls of fulmars and gannets,
Britt’s heart beat with a rhythm she’d never felt.

Now Bjorn is gone – lost in a battle filled with whispering arrows and ringing axes.
Moans. Howls. Cries of victory. Shouts of loss.
And the never-ending scent of enemy blood.

What remains of him? The song of gannets and the smile of a child named Hjerte Sang.

 

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Comments
  1. Poor Bjorn, but he left a heartfelt child, and a verdant and stony picture.
    Nice. Randy

    Happy Holidays.

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  2. Oh this is a story that happens all to often… going off to war leaving only songs behind.

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  3. Sandra says:

    Nicely written, the language was excellent.

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  4. Beautiful and sweet story/poem. 🙂

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  5. Subroto says:

    Liked this take on the prompt about love, war and remembrance.

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  6. plaridel says:

    enjoyed reading your story and the way you ended it.

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  7. draliman says:

    A very bitter sweet tale, losing Bjorn but she has his child. I love your descriptions.

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  8. Dear Alicia,

    A well-written and touching piece. And a nice tribute to our own Björn.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  9. Amy Reese says:

    This is an incredible piece, Alicia, and I think one of the best I’ve read from you. There’s a lot of nice moments and it has a great rhythm to it. I had to smile that you put Bjorn’s name in it. 🙂 I love that her heart beat to a rhythm never felt.

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  10. It’s almost a song in itself. Lovely.

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  11. Margaret says:

    Beautiful imagery and rhythms. I like how you described Bjorn’s loss, and how he lives on in the memories, sounds, and of course the child. Lovely story. I also enjoyed listening again to stories of the World War 1 Christmas truce.

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    • I’m glad you enjoyed Heart Song. Listening to those stories inspired this one, but my husband and I have been watching Vikings on the history channel and that slanted Britt and Bjorn (couldn’t resist using his name) toward a different era. Happy New Year

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  12. Ellespeth says:

    Beautiful and sad and happy. I’ve read this several times, Alicia. It’s a great piece! I can hear the seabirds singing at the end.
    Happy Holidays!
    Ellespeth

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  13. rgayer55 says:

    All I can say is, “Wow!” Beautifully painted images here. I can’t add much to the other comments, but agree with Amy, this is one of your best so far.

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  14. Alicia, This sounded just like a Norse myth. What a lovely romantic tale. Unfortunately many families have been left behind when men went off to war never to return. Well told and written. Happy Holidays! — Suzanne

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  15. Poor Björn! At least he’s honored with a song and this wonderful story! Well done, Alicia.

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  16. dmmacilroy says:

    Dear Alicia,

    There should be a ‘loved this to pieces’ button to click for stories such as this. Everything about your story resonated in my heart and made me smile. You captured love and history and sense of place so effortlessly and wrapped it all up with a bow and the sweet image of a child named Hjerte Sang.

    Absolutely masterful. Remember this one. (I shall.)

    Aloha,

    Doug

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  17. hafong says:

    Oh, what a wonderful song, Alicia! I can hear the call to battle. I’m standing on the wall, feeling the spray.

    Lily

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  18. Kirsten says:

    I like how you put Bjorn’s name in your story. You painted a wonderful word picture of the situation. It made me feel like I was there…

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  19. Blake says:

    Your writing here is beautifully poised, understated yet brimming with emotion.

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