Massah’s Gone Crazy

Posted: March 12, 2015 in Friday Fictioneers
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Frost on a  stump. Sandra Crook.

I’m later than usual to the party and have to leave early so if I don’t read as many stories as usual, please forgive. Thanks Sandra for another thought provoking photo.

Massah been teasin’ all day. Tellin’ jokes likes, “There’s a nigger, a Jew and a A-rab . . .”
Been ridin’ his fancy horse down the rows, smilin’, askin’ ’bout our little chillens.
Ain’t his usual way. Billie says, “Day’s too hot.” 
And Massah says, “Think of them cotton balls like they’s snowballs covered with a cool layer of frost.”
Afterwards, he grins and says if Billie can pick one bag o’ cotton in one minute, he’s a free man.
Billie flies down them rows. Massah nods. Billie walks away.
Massah spurs his horse. Bang! Billie goes down.
Massah laughs like that’s the best joke of all.

  1. draliman says:

    A powerful tale of slavery. Nicely written, and I love the dialect.

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  2. Great dialect and the story is gut wrenching. Great job!


  3. That was harsh!
    I’ve just begun reading 12 Years a Slave today.
    What a coincidence!

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  4. Whoa. This one chills me to the bone… SO well done, Alicia, and amazing use of the prompt. Fantastic!

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  5. Amy Reese says:

    Alicia I think the dialect really works well. I like the imagery of the cotton balls, like snowballs covered with a cool layer of frost. It’s hard to believe humans treat each other this way. Such cruelty and yet it continues to this day.

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  6. Dear Alicia,

    You’ve painted a clear and sickening picture of Massah. Excellent use of dialect and a great bit of storytelling.



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  7. A wonderful voice, and a grueling story, very well told.

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  8. Sandra says:

    The dialect works well; it often doesn’t – it can get in the way. But this is very effective. And it left me feeling outraged. Good work.

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  9. dmmacilroy says:

    Dear Alicia,

    I love how far afield you’ve gone from the prompt and I love imagining your thought process as you conjured up this story. That this had to have happened many times to many lives makes it all the more sad. Very well done.



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  10. A sad vignette in the larger picture of an issue that continues to blight societies in many countries still. Great voice/dialogue and characterisation.

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  11. This makes me feel sick .. the thought of actually “making fun” like that.. I’m sure it happened.. and I hope there are a place in any type of afterlife for such beasts that is scorching hot.


  12. This is so well done, I had a hard time hitting the “like” button because your story stirred up so many bad feelings and bad emotion in me.
    It’s a great story, beautifully written, interesting, but such a terrible thing.
    Good work!!


  13. plaridel says:

    reading your story felt like watching a movie. well done.


  14. hafong says:

    Oh, cruel but well written! When I was in Ghana, I had visited a castle where they held slaves before they put them on ships. It’s hard to think of humans doing those things to other humans.



  15. Wow. That was powerful – you’ve captured the cruel heartlessness of Massah and his ilk superbly.


  16. A terribly sad story done with realistic dialect that shows the evil in having too much power over others. Well done, Alicia. — Suzanne


  17. rgayer55 says:

    Massah very bad man. His day be comin’


  18. Nice use of dialect which created the atmosphere of slavery in a few words. You couldn’t have done better if you’d had 12 years a slave to create it!

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