Sarah’s Magic

Posted: March 18, 2015 in Friday Fictioneers
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© Copyright - Rachel Bjerke

The smell of wood smoke scents Sarah’s world. Fragments of shattered glass, collected near the castle and arranged in neat rows along the top of the rock wall, bring it color. Her bed is made of gathered moss. She sleeps beneath the stars.

The silken strands of Sarah’s flax-white hair weave themselves into tangled knots and drag upon the ground. She festoons the ends with feathers. Her dresses are nothing more than collected rags, pieced together in patches of variegated browns and occasional pieces of red.

Why would the queen want to see her? Has she heard? Sarah can weave straw into gold.

  1. Such an interesting take on the story and retelling of Rumpelstiltskin, Alicia. I really enjoyed envisioning her world and the contrast between what she values and what the queen values.



  2. What a vivid image you paint in this story. Very nice!


  3. I love it! I fee like it should begin with, Once Upon a Time. 🙂


  4. I thoroughly enjoyed your tale! Nicely assembled 🙂


  5. The last sentence could for me either be Sarah’s own beliefs and in reality as sad as her whole appearance or it could be the beginning of a fairy tale… I like that ambiguity.


  6. Lovely story. And hopefully no foot stamping.

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  7. plaridel says:

    simply beautiful. you must be truly inspired when you wrote this story.


  8. subroto says:

    Beautifully done, very descriptive makes you feel as if you are right there next to her.


  9. Sandra says:

    So vividly described – I got a real picture here. Well done.


  10. draliman says:

    Lovely story. I have a feeling that Sarah’s quite simple and idyllic-sounding life is about to get a lot more complicated.
    Beautiful descriptions!


  11. dmmacilroy says:

    Dear Alicia,

    You infused this piece with a beautiful voice and presence. It felt like present day just round the corner from here. Very well done.




  12. Dear Alicia,

    Hmm…I have to wonder if Sarah can spin straw into gold, why is she wearing rags? Perhaps the queen will pay her for time and skill. On the other hand, it doesn’t work that way in fairy tales does it? Nicely done.



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  13. elmowrites says:

    Fairytale Queens aren’t known for their generosity, but I liked that line at the end that turned his beautiful description into something very different. Good stuff


  14. gahlearner says:

    I picture Sarah as a story teller about whom people say she can turn straw into gold with her stories. The queen probably didn’t get the last part, and the tale begins… Great take on the prompt, very vivid.


  15. rgayer55 says:

    We’ve got a barn she could stay in, some burlap sack for future dresses, and lots and lots of straw. Tell her she can come stay with us.


  16. Jan Brown says:

    Great imagery–which you’ve woven into a tapestry much as Sarah must weave her gold!


  17. I think it’s obvious why a queen would want to meet her!
    I found interesting how although she can weave gold you described her to be and dress so selfless and having nothing.
    Great job!


  18. mjlstories says:

    I love the way this could be magic or madness, contemporary or fairy story. Sarah could be 18 or 80, or perhaps both.
    This tale is working some shape-shifting magic!

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  19. Margaret says:

    Wonderful, evocative images. Sarah’s world comes alive. I love it.


  20. Really good storytelling Alicia. The last line really works well I feel

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  21. EagleAye says:

    Love all the visuals in this. I think Sarah would be a fascinating and beautiful sight to behold. Someone who looks so magical should be able to spin straw into gold. Wonderful descriptions in this.


  22. Oooo, I really like this one. The beginning of a wonderful fairy tale! Well done 🙂

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  23. Cool fairy tale, Anonymous Alicia, brings to mind Rumplestilskin. I want to see her too, along with the Queen.

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    • Sometimes I have the darnedest time getting my blog address in right so I become incognito Alicia. I wouldn’t mind running into Sarah before the Queen gets a hold of her. Thanks for reading Perry. Always enjoy your sense of humor.


  24. No doubt that would be a good reason to summon her! This is a wonderfully descriptive piece, Alicia, which tells as much story in what you’ve included as what you haven’t. The details really spring to life, and that final line delivers so much! Great job.


  25. AnnIsikArts says:

    Full of mystery. You evoke your heroine masterfully. She could easily be a character from Shakespeare. One of his mad women! Equally, a Victorian ‘Romantic’ mad woman. And yes, a fairy tale character and not mad at all. When the queen’s finished with her, I’d like her to come to me and weave me some gold. 🙂


  26. hafong says:

    A true free spirit! I like her.



  27. Beautiful, descriptive words woven together to make a lovely picture of a very different type of person. Well done, Alicia. 🙂 — Suzanne

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