I’ve been preparing a manuscript to pitch at a writer’s conference and been remiss with my Friday Fictioneers submissions. I’ve missed reading all of yours and am not sure how many I’ll read this go-around so please forgive.
they’ll never fly, these little birds
they’ve been broken
piece by piece
colorful
yes
and they can sing
oh, yes
beautifully
when they need to
when they have to
but all the joy
has been wrenched
from their souls
stolen
the men around them laugh
and drink
take their pleasure
when they please
and the chicks cry
howl
plead
no one hears
no one sees
they turn their backs
as the little birds
crumble
one by one
Tragically sad and beautifully written. To have brought such poetry from that picture… Hats off to you!
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Thanks! I’m so not a poet – just dabbling. Appreciate your comment. Alicia
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Ode to the past. Very well done!
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Thanks so much!
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Clever use of the words Alicia – I’m impressed.
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Thank you. Poetry is not my forte, just dabbling. Appreciate your comment.
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Clever use of the prompt and a nice piece, Alicia.
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Thank you, Sandra. Trying to think outside the box, which is wobbly at best.
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Nice flow to those words.
Best wishes on your pitch as the writer’s conference. I’d love to hear more about your manuscript.
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Thanks, Russell. The conference was last weekend. One of the agents I pitched wants the full manuscript both in print and on-line. The novel is a YA about the friendship between a young Norwegian settler – Jacob Engen – and a Makah Indian – Pistol Pete – in the 1800’s. It takes the reader through family relations, the clash of cultures and first love for both boys.
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Congratulations! Asking for a complete manuscript is a very good sign. It sounds like a great story. I want a signed copy when it gets published. 🙂
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From your lips . . . Thanks!
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Dear Alicia,
Lovely poem.
Best wishes at the conference. Like Russell I’d like to hear more about your manuscript. Are you pitching to an agent or an editor? Just remember each pitch is a step in the right direction regardless of the outcome.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Rochelle, I’m glad you liked my third stab at any poetry. This is what happens when you hang out with poets. See above reply to Russell for a short “pitch” about my novel. Thanks for being interested.
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This so sad and beautiful, your words drew me right in. I think everyone here understands being busy. Good luck with your manuscript.
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Oh, thank you so very much. Glad you liked the wee bit of sad poetry. Cars with their noses in the dirt must do that to me. Cheers!
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That last verse is so poignant, yet beautiful. Good luck with the manuscript…
Here’s me Friday Fictioneer fiction
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Thanks for both lovely comments.
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Very sad, but such a beautiful poem. I’m not a big fan of poems, but this one I love!
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Secret? Me neither. I’m glad you liked “Broken”.
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Fabulously done (you may want to fix your link… must be done on the “text” tab, not the “visual” one… 😉
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Thank you for your kind comment! (I do right my FF entries in text. Will go back and check. Thanks.)
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Ypu were inspired this week Alicia!
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I’m so glad you think so. Thanks.
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clipped wings don’t do justice for these birds.
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Nope, not at all. Thanks for stopping by.
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Experienced poet or not, you’ve written something that evokes an emotion – so mission accomplished! I read this as a very dark ugly piece – the caged bird imagery representing slavery (sexual slavery specifically)… well done.
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Thanks so much – yep, sexual slavery. Thinking of all those poor kidnapped school girls.
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A heart-breaking piece of beautiful poetry, Alicia. The use of color here, from the prompt, is stunning. Love this one!
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Thanks, Dawn. Your comments are always appreciated.
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Beautiful words, Alicia. Best of luck on your pitch! How exciting. I will be thinking positive thoughts for you.
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Thanks on both accounts, Amy. The pitch went well. Am sending a copy of the full MS by mail and by email. Fingers crossed.
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Yay!! Great news.
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Oh so great about the manuscript… the poem can be read in so many ways, very inspired from the picture
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Thanks, Bjorn. I’ll be sending the manuscript sometime this week. I have some changes to make per my most wonderful editor friend. Glad you liked the poem.
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Great use of the picture to focus on a dreadful practice. Very thought-provoking.
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Thanks very much, Margaret. I appreciate your coming by. Alicia
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Sad but lovely piece. I hope all goes well with your manuscript. Well done. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Thanks! I mailed the hard copy today ~ tomorrow the email goes out.
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