The Busker

Posted: July 22, 2015 in Friday Fictioneers
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Goodness! Wednesday/Friday has rolled around again. Thanks to Dee, we have snow in July. My 101 word story was inspired by an article on NPR – so, thanks to them, too.

Billy slipped into his shoes, holes and all, and stepped outside. Ice crystals tickled his skin. Snow. Tightening his shabby coat across his ten-year-old chest, he shuffled to the train station. The soles of his feet registered the number of travelers scurrying across the wooden platform – more than usual. Perhaps this would be the day he could buy carrots and potatoes for his mother. Quickly retrieving five leather balls from his pocket, he began juggling – sensing the balls by the change in the air.
Billy heard a coin drop.
“Come away, Stephanie,” a woman said.
“But, Mamma, Blind Billy is back!”

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  1. Not sure what the radio story was about, but your story is very poignant. Nicely done.

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  2. ansumani says:

    Such a sad tale….you pulled all my heart strings. Good description and slipping “blind billy” in the end was a good touch.

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  3. Vinay Leo R. says:

    Beautiful. I think with all the other senses being heightened during the narration, I could come to know that, but the ending would’ve been bit unsure had you not slipped the word in. 🙂 Very emotional story. Enjoyed reading it.

    Leo @ I Rhyme Without Reason

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  4. What a touching story. This really touched my heart. Excellent.

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  5. 100 or so words I always say. I like your story. The brevity works well and the story is complete. Do Not count my words … ever. ha ha
    Tracey

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  6. Sandra says:

    Very touching. Nicely done.

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  7. Dear Alicia,

    You always bring something unique. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  8. draliman says:

    Poor lad, it sounds like he and his family have a hard life. I hope there will be many more coins dropping.

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  9. Beautifully written, this is such a sad, sad story.

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  10. rgayer55 says:

    I’m hoping he draws a big crowd and collects a hat full of coins. Maybe today is the day. Good luck, Billy.

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  11. Amy Reese says:

    Very well described. I got that he was blind from your intricate details. Nice work! NPR has the greatest stories, don’t they? Imagine a blind juggler. I hope he has success.

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    • Thanks, Amy, the NPR article was about buskers somewhere in India? Iran? I can’t remember, I was half listening as I looked at Dee’s picture. My mind put a busker in the picture and away my fingers went. Glad you could tell Billy was blind from the details.

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  12. micklively says:

    What a way to make a living. Measure your country, not by what the high-flyers achieve, but how the lowest survive.
    Good piece.

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  13. Lynda says:

    I love surprise endings, Alicia. This story is one of the best. I always enjoy your work. I haven’t been around much in the FFs gang of late. I must remedy that!

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  14. Love the tenderness of this. Wonderful.

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  15. ceayr says:

    Great piece, expertly crafted.

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  16. gahlearner says:

    Very beautiful, both story and writing. I loved how you showed Billy’s world, how he compensates for his missing sense, in all the details. It made me wonder, while I read, could I do that? And he juggles… I knew he was blind by your description, but the Blind Billy line added an extra punch. He’s been there regularly. People know him. A sad think that no one helps him and his mum with more than a few coins.

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  17. Dale says:

    Tough little fellow, doing his part to help his mother. Since he is a known person, one would hope even more help would come their way…

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  18. wildbilbo says:

    Very clever.

    Particularly These lines:
    “The soles of his feet registered the number of travelers scurrying across the wooden platform – more than usual”
    & “ensing the balls by the change in the air” – brilliant. Very subtle (in that I didnt get it first time), but very clever.
    Cheers
    KT

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  19. Good story with great description, Alicia. Poor child. Too bad those conditions still exist for the poor in some places. Well written. 🙂 — Suzanne

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  20. Melanie says:

    Children are so much more accepting than adults. Good for Stephanie.

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  21. Margaret says:

    Very nice setting up of Billy’s predicament, and his positive attitude. The clues to the reality of his blindness work very well, and the ending is just right. Sad.

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