Yes, indeed, it’s Wednesday/Friday for our merry band of Friday Fictioneers. Thanks Marie Gail for an interesting photo and thanks Rochelle for keeping us on our toes. Now ~ here is my 100 word contribution for the week.
Sadie peered at the lifeless mouse on her doorstep.”Zelda is one crazy flora-dora.”
“That ain’t nothin’,” Samuel stepped outside.”She dropped a dead coyote on my porch last week.”
“Coyote? He be a trickster and thief, lot like you,” Sadie said.
“Maybe yes. Maybe no.” Samuel toed the mouse. “But why’d she leave this on your stoop?”
“Mr. Mouse be the smart one. He be seein’ right into people’s thievin’ hearts.”
“Humph.” Samuel stuffed his hands deep inside his pockets.
“And I sees right through you, Samuel Makutsi. ‘Cause I knows you hidin’ mamma’s pearl earrings in your ratty old fist.”
Bang to rights.
Good piece.
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Thanks, Mick.
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The voices are great, the culprit found out, but my understanding is limited by language. Try as I might, I couldn’t find a fitting definition for flora-dora (other than showgirls).
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In this context, it’s a term for someone who performs witchcraft. Thanks for asking and taking time to do the research! Always appreciate your reading and commenting on my work. Alicia
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What a terrific little vignette. And convincingly told too.
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I wrote this at 4:30 am and wasn’t sure about it. Thanks for your kind words, Sandra.
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Glad I dropped in today to read this, Alicia! I think you got the voice just right, although I tend to associate Coyote the trickster with the southwest American Indians. Well done.
janet
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Me, too, but somehow coyote cried out to be in this story. Glad you dropped by. Alicia
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Great characters here, beautifully honed. Maybe some more?
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I’m glad you liked Sadie and Samuel. It might be fun to see how long a run they could have through Friday Fictioneers!
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That’s great, Sadie be some crazy flora dora herself!
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Indeed! Sadie is a bit on the left side of normal. Thanks for reading Mouse vs Coyote.
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Excellent! One of my favorites so far this week.
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Oh! Thank you so very much. Alicia
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I like the voices of the characters. Had to read comments to find out the flora-dora meaning…but it was a fun story. Nicely done.
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Thanks. Flora-dora is a term I read long time ago in one of my favorite books. Not sure it’s a real word – seems to have been made up by the author, but I love it. Alicia
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Fun stuff. Caught red-handed!
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Yep!
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I have to say it sounds difficult to be a thief among witches.. 🙂
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HA! This made me laugh, Bjorn. Thanks for that.
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that was a nice at the end. didn’t expect it.
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Actually, neither did I. Thanks for reading.
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Great story Alicia – you are good! Nan
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Thanks very much, Nan. That means a lot. Alicia
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I love when you write this kind of vignette. You’re so good at capturing a voice and mood, Alicia. Nice job!
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Thanks, Dawn. I tend to fall back on this voice when I’m stuck.
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Well “stuck” suits you, Alicia. 😉
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Zelda has the measure of them! Loved the dialogue.
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Yep, Zelda’s on top of things, that’s for sure. Thank you.
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Fabulous voices Alicia
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I appreciate your lovely comment. Thanks.
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ah..a good one 🙂
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Thanks!
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Nice segue into Sam’s thievin’. Good thing the mouse showed up when he did. Nice take on the prompt.
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Thanks, Joseph.
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Great characterisation and dialogue 🙂
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Thank you very much. Alicia
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Superb dialogue. Samuel should have known by now that nothing stays hidden from Sadie 🙂
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You got that right! Thanks for reading and leaving a comment.
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Great dialogue – you nail the patois here, really gives it character. 🙂
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Thank you. I tend to use it a lot ~ maybe it’s time to step outside the box. Glad you stopped by. Alicia
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I loved the voice and where the story took us. The only place I stumbled was Samuel’s last name. It seemed rather odd based on their dialect.
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Thanks for letting me know this, Russell. The characters are slaves on a southern plantation. So coyote may fit less than Makutsi. I borrowed the name from one of Alexander McCall Smith’s male characters in The No.1 Ladies’ Detective Agency series set in Batswana, Always appreciate your questions. Alicia
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HA! Called out. Well done
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There’s no getting around Sadie. Thanks for reading.
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Love the voices in this – really strong depicting their characters.
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Thank you so much, Alicia
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Cute little story, and I’m looking forward to the dead coyote on my doorstep!
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Oh! It hasn’t arrived yet? I sent it last…. Thanks for stopping by, Perry.
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Ha, I love the witchy way of this!
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Thanks, Dawn. Sometimes a picture prompt screams for a witchy-way.
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I totally get that!
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Great dialect, Alicia. It colored this story beautifully. Looks like those two have known each other a long time. Thanks for explaining “flora-dora.” I didn’t know that term either. Well done. 🙂 — Suzanne
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These two are longtime friends/enemies. They’ve known each other so long, there are no more secrets. Always enjoy it when you stop by. Alicia
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Flora-dora is someone who does witchcraft? How cool is that?! I learned something new. I’ll take the mouse over the coyote and hope that I won’t be having any flora-dora visits. A dead bird in my house is about all I can handle. Alicia. Great piece. I love the voice, too.
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Thanks, Amy. In this particular piece a flora-dora is a witchy-woman. Or maybe just a crazy one. Hope your having great days full of friends and family. Alicia
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You’ve suggested a whole world around this little scene – wonderful. And the dialogue just sparkles.
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Thank you, Margaret. What a lovely way to put it. Alicia
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