Color Us Gone

Posted: October 21, 2015 in Friday Fictioneers
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Time flies and it’s Wednesday again. The picture prompt is courtesy of Ron Pruitt, posted by our illustrious Friday Fictioneers blog fairy. Rochelle is celebrating her third year as our fearless leader and retirement to boot. Congrats to her. Now my 100 words.

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Teddy was the biggest cowboy Lydia ever met. Also, the craziest – in a good way. He never wore jeans or shirts with pearl buttons. No, her Teddy wore big shorts, T-shirts, and his heart on his sleeve.

Teddy carried his lunch in a white plastic bag, “Case it rains.” It never rained in Texas. Except that day. That day Teddy put on black jeans, a pearl-buttoned shirt, and tucked his heart in safe place. That day Teddy took baby June out in the rain and got on the Jefferson bus.

Teddy’s note read:  You love meth more than me and Junie

 

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  1. It seems like such a very happy story, throughout most of it. Does the reference to meth mean that she has a drug problem?

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  2. gahlearner says:

    Last line is a killer, what a twist. Gotta love Teddy, great characterization.

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  3. I think meth is a lover that can never be shared… Teddy made the right decision, too bad for Lydia, but there’s no prenup in her current marriage.

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  4. Dear Alicia,

    I hope Lydia gets some help. Tragic ending to a well constructed story.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  5. Sandra says:

    Nicely done Alicia. I wasn’t expecting that ending.

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  6. It was all looking pretty good, until….. .Nice one.
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  7. So sad. Thats meth for you.

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  8. Oh, how terrible. But meth is a terrible drug and very difficult to kick. Nicely unexpected ending.

    I think you put your link info into your post while on the “Visual” rather than “HTML” page. It’s in HTML, not as a link. 🙂 Been there, done that.

    janet

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  9. Very good – I’d be interested to read the darker version.

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  10. draliman says:

    Sweet story – until the last line. I hope this is the shock she needs to get some help, and then maybe her family back.

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  11. Poor Teddy. I love that he is portrayed as a big softie but we see how much strength he has when in matters. I also love the idea that he tucked his heart in a safe place while he took such a difficult step

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  12. ceayr says:

    Pow!
    Great finish to a terrific story.
    Love it.

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  13. Dale says:

    Ohh… love how you brought us along and then whammo… Teddy done made the right decision…

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  14. That is a bittersweet story. So glad that he and the baby escaped the drug-addicted mother. And yet, it’s so, so sad!
    As always, a beautifully narrated tale, Alicia!

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  15. plaridel says:

    you hid the twist right on the very last sentence. how clever of you. 🙂

    by the way, on my previous FF post, the marriage proposal, i suggested a manual method of putting the blue frog link in your post. you’re free to take a look if you’re interested.

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  16. tedstrutz says:

    The note was a stab to my heart. Well done. Nice name choice, btw.

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  17. Really liked it too.

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  18. I really like Teddy. The characterization was pitch perfect. He was a simple man but he had his priorities right. In 100 words you let us know this family. Brilliant writing.
    Tracey

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  19. hafong says:

    You have to love a cowboy like him. So not a sad story. He saved baby June.

    Lily

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  20. Amy Reese says:

    It was the right move for him to leave Lydia, especially since there is a child involved. He was right to protect the child. Meth is such a destructive, ugly force. After three tries at rehab, my brother finally got better. Well constructed story, Alicia.

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  21. rgayer55 says:

    I’m glad he overcame his soft-hearted Teddy Bear persona and was able to take the baby and flee. Probably a gut-wrenching decision, but at least they are away from that dangerous and destructive behavior. Well written, Alicia.

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  22. cowboys don’t let your babies grow up with meth mamas

    a new spin on the old song:
    mamas don’t let your babies grow up to be cowboys

    Randy

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  23. Margaret says:

    I love how you’ve built this character. He seems to be one thing but you twist everything round and there’s a whole lot more to discover about Teddy. Fantastic.

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  24. ansumani says:

    I like the description of his clothes on the day Teddy left that shows his change of heart …a great example of showing and not telling. Good ending line. Well written.

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  25. An excellent twist. Teddy seems so mellow and easy going at the start of the story, but shows his backbone when it matters. Loved it.

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  26. The first part of the story is no doubt the way she sees life, but his taking the little girl and leaving tells the rest of it. Good story and well done, Alicia. —- Suzanne

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