Summer Dream (or Nightmare)

Posted: November 4, 2015 in Friday Fictioneers
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Perhaps these 102 words are a bit off-center, I’m not sure. Thanks to “Mrs. Russell” for the photo and to our fearless leader, Rochelle, for posting yet another interesting picture to lure us into doing our very best in 100 words.
PHOTO PROMPT - © Connie Gayer (Mrs. Russell)

“Thou speak’st aright this night.”
Bam!
“I am hard-wired for this job!”
Bam!
“Two down, lots to go. A merrier hour was never wasted!”
Bam! Bam! Bam!
“Man. Woman. Man. Woman. Must be equal on both sides.”
Bam!
“No kids.”
Bam!
“Naked legs and naked arms a-tangle as they fall. Silly grins and kisses all. No flowers pressed upon the eyes. Got a gun today.”
Bam!
“Shoots straight. Shoots true.”
Bam!
***
At dawn our Puck tip-toes from the woods, whispering, “If we shadows have offended, think but this, and all is mended. That you have but slumber’d here. While these visions did appear.”

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Comments
  1. Melanie says:

    Ooo…ouch! I love it. Very clever.

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  2. ceayr says:

    What a bizarre take.
    Hugely entertaining.

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  3. ansumani says:

    I may be lost in these woods… Is it a description of a shooting?

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  4. Chilling. Can’t say that I like the implication but it’s well written. I doubt William could have imagined our violent world.

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    • I think this story can be taken two ways ~ thus the title. And, no, William couldn’t have imagined our violent world, although I think his world had its own unimaginable violence. Thanks so much for reading and commenting.

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  5. Steve Elmore says:

    Absolutely loved this, Lish!

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  6. hafong says:

    Clever take on Shakespeare, Alicia. You’ve delivered the scene well. Wish I could think not like my mundane self. 🙂 Maybe this will jolt my brain.

    Lily

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  7. plaridel says:

    the woods are dark and deep indeed.

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  8. Dale says:

    Quite clever indeed!

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  9. Very interesting take, had to look up puck and midsummer dreams. I hope it stays a dream.

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  10. Sandra says:

    An interesting read but I felt uncomfortable in a way that I can’t verbalise. After three re-reads I don’t think it worked for me. It’s good to think out of the box though – well done.

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  11. Margaret says:

    Such a violent Puck! Clever interpretation. Actually I gave the Bard a bit of an (updated) airing myself this week.

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  12. Oh, a Shakespearean take on our modern world. So well delivered, the Bard would be proud!

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  13. Dear Alicia,

    Innovative take on the prompt. I liked the connection to Shakespeare, however I found the ‘bams’ were a bit over the top. I certainly can’t fault you for imagination.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • As I told Sandra, this may be too much for me, too. I’m recuperating from corrective eye surgery and yesterday was a particularly trying day. I think my writing reflects that. Thanks for your comment.

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  14. Sounds like YOUR guy is creepy too!! ha ha! 😉

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  15. rgayer55 says:

    And I thought I was the only one who could twist Bill Snakeskin’s work into an odd shape. 🙂
    Brilliantly done, Alicia.

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  16. Quite an explosive take on Ol’ Will… 🙂

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  17. Solothefirst says:

    Feat take on the prompt… Bam!

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  18. draliman says:

    I’ve never read “A Midsummer Night’s Dream” but this worked for me as a psycho shooter. Once I got 2/3 of the way through and read the word “gun” I re-read it in that context – very chilling.

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  19. Struggling with this – I’ve seen the play once or twice but don’t know it other than Bottom has a dream and Puck behaves badly. But your piece has some great lines especially “Naked legs and naked arms a-tangle as they fall. Silly grins and kisses all. No flowers pressed upon the eyes. Got a gun today.”

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  20. “Run for your life!” is all I can say!

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  21. mjlstories says:

    I’m honestly still thinking about this one – and will be for a while. A strange, weird piece – i like to be provoked!

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  22. “We are such stuff as dreams are made on, but in my case mostly nightmares.” I know, I know, wrong play. Great take on the prompt.

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  23. gahlearner says:

    I love it, what an idea. But to me it’s a nightmare. Imagine magical creatures with today’s weapons. Shudder…

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  24. Amy Reese says:

    Wow, gritty and thought provoking stuff, Alicia. It seems like a nightmare to me. Great style and use of language. Nice work.

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  25. If I understand this correctly, Alicia, one interpretation is that the characters are dreaming of the shootings. Well written in a creative way. Well done. —- Suzanne

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    • Suzanne, Puck is actually shooting love flower juices at young lovers instead of applying the juice to their eyes as Puck did in Shakespeare’s A Midsummer Night’s Dream. This way he can get the job done faster and apply it to more couples. Rochelle pointed out that using “Bam” might have been too harsh, too over the top. Thanks for working with me on this. Alicia

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  26. You did a bang up job with this prompt, Alicia.

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