The Dream

Posted: December 2, 2015 in Friday Fictioneers
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Walk through the gate. Follow the light.
I will be yours forever.
For you, my men will erect a castle
using crystal, marble and steel.
For you, the women shall sew garments
of silk decorated with golden threads,
glistening diamonds.
Come.
Walk through the gate.
Be mine.

“Tonya!” The young woman jolts awake. “Bring me them nails!”
She stands.The flour sack dress she’s been hand-stitching for a week falls to the dirt.
Squinting into the sun, she sees her man hammering together boards, building a one-room shack in a field of weeds.
She rubs her pregnant belly.
Smiles.
Life couldn’t be better.

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Comments
  1. ansumani says:

    Tonya has a positive spirit- the courage to dream and the acceptance to be happy in her tough present state. Good one.

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  2. Thank goodness for imagination. Nicely done! Amazing what each person sees in these photos.

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  3. This is what I first saw in the picture.. but it changed when I started to write… I actually thought of a place for romani beggars..

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  4. Dale says:

    One man’s shack is another’s castle! It’s all in the eye of the beholder. This is an excellent example of love what you have. Love this.

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  5. It’s all a matter of perspective.
    Nice and light 🙂

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  6. Sandra says:

    Nicely done. I could almost feel the scratchiness of that flour sack dress.

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  7. Dear Alicia,

    I love the atmosphere you created in this story. It’s all perspective. I think this will be a happy marriage.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  8. draliman says:

    She has everything she needs, grateful for what she’s got. Nice story!

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  9. My favourite so far! Left me smiling.

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  10. gahlearner says:

    Great turn around of a dreamer who is happy with her life. Other girls’ dreams would probably be her nightmare. I love it.

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  11. This is so beautiful. I applaud your imagination to combine poetry and prose, works wonderfully.

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  12. liz young says:

    She’s a sensible woman – enjoys her dreams but is happy with her reality.

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  13. plaridel says:

    beautifully rendered. if this is not love, i don’t know what love is.

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  14. The voice saying to follow me is something corrupt, like the voice of greed. The contrast is the reality of her life.

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  15. Dreams help us appreciate reality even more … well sometimes.

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  16. Solothefirst says:

    I see hope here, even through the sadness. A great take on the prompt

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  17. rgayer55 says:

    Ah, a dreamer of dreams. Not a bad thing. In fact, I’m rather guilty myself.

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  18. tedstrutz says:

    Excellent. I’m in awe of this one.

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  19. “All that glitters is not gold.” Lovely piece.

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  20. Amy Reese says:

    I love the dream sequence and your description of the garments. It’s nice when life can be a satisfying and perfect when we know what really matters. Nice work, Alicia.

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  21. I wish I had her attitude. I whine for 15 minutes if I get a paper cut. Well-written (actually poetic) as as usual.

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  22. Margaret says:

    I love the contrast between her dream and her reality. Your tone is perfect in both halves of the story. And I like the details of ‘her man” and her hand on her belly – it shows that despite her poverty, she’s happy. (Just a small typo, I believe – an extra “c” has crept into “stitching”.)

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    • Margaret, Thanks for your lovely comment. Always appreciate your stopping by.
      Also THANK YOU for pointing out the extra “c” in stitching. I’ve recently had corrective eye surgery and the left eye isn’t up to snuff yet, so things are a bit blurry at best. I checked, checked and rechecked my submission and obviously missed that error. Many thanks.

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  23. subroto says:

    Wonderful contrast between two worlds and I have no doubt over which one will be happier.

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  24. Good story, Alicia. Tonya has to have been raised in that kind of poverty to accept it with a good attitude. She has probably known nothing else. At least they won’t be homeless. It sounds as though they’re western settlers. I hope she has family and friends nearby to help her. Well done. — Suzanne

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  25. The poetry of the first part is beautiful, Alicia, and makes the reality that much more visceral. Really well done!

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