Culverins fired.
Crocks rattling against the walls of her stone farmhouse
Rhona crammed memories inside a sporran: her wedding shift, mother’s thimble, dead daughter’s rattle.
After two months of eating nothing but apples, the shift no longer fit.
Still, Rhona needed something to remind her of happier days.
“Head north,” her husband had instructed before falling in with the Jacobites.
“Bring the stones to ensure your passage.”
Clothed in dark trousers and a clan MacDougall shawl
Rhona pushed through a crush of villagers, moving south.
Enveloped in billowing smoke,
she hoped no one would notice the ruby earrings hidden beneath her hair.
That packed a lot of feeling and atmosphere into 100 words
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Thank you. This was my second time around with this picture. Thought I ought to try something new….
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She doesn’t seem like she would own ruby earrings. What could they mean?
You’ve got me wondering….
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Jewels are money, no matter the time in history or the apparent circumstance. Thanks for reading and wondering.
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I’m intrigued by this. Is she heading south to avoid her husband?
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I meant the villagers were moving south. She’s pressing AGAINST the “herd”.
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Ah yes that is clear.
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Very tring times ahead for her.
Seems like she’s lost everything, husband, daughter and now home.
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Yes, she has.
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An impressive sense of urgency and flight. I enjoyed it.
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Thanks, Sandra. I was listening to the soundtrack from The Outlander while I wrote this.
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I really like how much of history you managed to catch with just a few words. the dead baby’s rattle, the specific words that made the timing right.. a great flash, on of the best I’ve read.
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Thank you, Bjorn. I wondered how this would work. It changed directions while I wrote – from Serbia to Scotland. I’m glad you found it one of the best.
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A great piece of history, full of images, well done. Mike
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Thanks, Mike. I’m not sure there were any homes around Culloden when this battle occurred but putting a civilian in the mix seemed intriguing.
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Frightening times, very atmospheric.
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Thank you.
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Dear Alicia
A little subtle change of direction. The sense of urgency is tangible. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks, Rochelle. I’m afraid the line – “Rhona pushed through a crush of villagers, moving south,” threw readers off. I’m thinking the action “moving south” refers to the last subject “villagers”. Shoulder shrug. I revised the sentence structure. I hope that helps. 😉
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Her direction confused me a bit, too, until I read the comments, but the rest is clear, earrings included. You created such a sense of determination in the face of loss, destruction and despair, it fellt like watching a movie. Excellent writing.
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Thanks. I love feedback like this and appreciate your taking the time to leave it. Cheers! Alicia
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My word! There’s a lot of story in 100 words. I hope she makes it.
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Thanks, Liz.
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This is so rich in detail, Alicia. Really wonderful. I really get the sense of the setting and tense atmosphere. Love the hope in a sparkle of a jewel!
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Thank you, Amy. Your comments always make my day. Alicia
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Reminded me of Stevenson’s Kidnapped.
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Mmmm. Interesting. Thanks for reading and commenting. I’ll need to revisit Stevenson’s story.
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It’s a great adventure story – but mainly for the boys I seem to remember. Nice to have a female version!
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Sounds like a scene from a longer historical novel, Alicia. Good writing. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Thanks!
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Very atmospheric and wth great sense of her against the world
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At least for a little while. Thank you for reading.
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A great take on the picture. I have an image of an Esmerelda-type character from The Hunchback of Notre Dame.
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Oh! What a great image.
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