Tonya’s Cart

Posted: October 12, 2016 in Friday Fictioneers
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PHOTO PROMPT © Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

The wheels on Tonya’s cart aren’t in sync.
Doesn’t matter.
The gravel path between the glaring street lights makes the cart,
bulging with stretched-out sweaters, a greasy sleeping bag,
and the canvas tarp she uses as a tent when there is still “real estate” beneath the bridge,
go all wonky.

Tonya fingers the soft pink blanket on top. Rattles the bag of marbles – good for trade.
Perhaps someone has milk.
But the knife – cold and swift – ends all ideas of trade.
She bleeds out while a man, not heeding the mewl of the baby, flees with Tonya’s cart.

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  1. neilmacdon says:

    Wow! That’s grim!

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  2. Really shocking Alicia!

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  3. Iain Kelly says:

    Yep, that is grim, but wonderful writing. Well done.

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  4. Oh my, that was heartbreaking. And still, we don’t see them. How heartbreaking…

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    • That was the idea. I don’t think we really see the people with the grocery carts or the men and women living under bridges. And even if we did, it’s hard to know what to do. Thanks for stopping by and leaving a comment.

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  5. michael1148humphris says:

    This was very real, great writing.

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  6. Laurie Bell says:

    Oh no…. so tragic at the cry of the baby… a sad life

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  7. draliman says:

    Wow, grim indeed. A hard life cut short. Now I’m worried about the baby…

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  8. Dear Alicia,

    You packed a lot of story into a few words. Very dark and grisly. Well done as always.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  9. gahlearner says:

    So dark, so sad. Great writing.

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  10. rgayer55 says:

    I’m sure this scene repeats itself around the world on a daily basis. I visited with a few homeless people and find that “the wheels are in sync” for many of them. Sad.

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  11. plaridel says:

    what a sad ending. what happens to the baby now?

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  12. When dark gets darker… This could be the start of a story…

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  13. Life Lessons of a Dog Lover says:

    Wow. So dark and thought provoking. It is one of those stories you read and it stays with you.

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  14. yarnspinnerr says:

    Sad. Quite a take on this one.

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  15. A powerfully written tale in only 100 words … masterful.
    I imagine it’s extremely difficult for people who are homeless.
    Sad ….
    Isadora 😎

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  16. Margaret says:

    A sad story, and the ending is powerful. I like how you brought in the trolley with wonky wheels, and the pink blanket and need for milk are clever touches, once you realise their true significance.

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  17. That’s heartrending, Alicia. I had an abscessed root canal in one of my teeth and it was pulled so I’m late with this and I’ll be taking some time off from flash fiction. This was great writing. Congratulations again on having your story published. 🙂 — Suzanne

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