Giselle Gives and Takes

Posted: October 19, 2016 in Friday Fictioneers

A special thank you to Rochelle for announcing that my story, “The Perfect Death”, was published in Sweet Tree Review.  It was incredibly exciting to get the email from the editors saying, “We are delighted to accept…” then see my work in print. And thanks to my fellow fictioneers for reading and commenting on my stories. What you say helps me refine my writing.

PHOTO PROMPT © Claire Fuller

Giselle accepted anything in payment for her rituals. Coins, stringed balloons, moss.
She performed an elaborate ceremony for the man who presented the painted rock, truly her favorite gift.
In general, Giselle found the men greedy: “More money” “A new wife.”
And the women simple: “A needle” or “Just a pair of shoes.”
She doted on the children for they always asked for sweet things:
“Heal my puppy” or “A little brother. P-l-e-a-s-e.”
They came to her shack alone. Hands wringing. Boots scraping.
All of them feeling needy.
Giselle gave them what they wanted but always kept their souls.

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Comments
  1. Iain Kelly says:

    The last line is terrifying! Nice twist at the end. Congratulations on your publication 🙂

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  2. Those Faustian pacts can be nasty . Congratulations upon your having been published

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  3. So you’re a James Joyce fan?

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  4. And here I thought she was really a benevolent woman! Great story. Congratulations on your publication!

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  5. Sandra says:

    This reminded me of Stephen King’s Needful Things. A good story, and congratulations on your success. More than well deserved.

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  6. tedstrutz says:

    I enjoyed The Perfect Death. And I enjoyed this story. You seem to have a way of sticking it at the end. (as they say in gymnastics)

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  7. Not really a Glenda the good witch type. Congratulations on your publication.
    Tracey

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  8. rgayer55 says:

    Just finished “A Private Death” on Sweet Tree Review. I liked the way see-sawed back and forth on the events of the day, the capri pants, and other details. What a peaceful way to go. Outstanding piece. Congrats on having it out for a whole new group of readers to enjoy.

    On today’s piece. I really was liking Giselle until the last line. Now, reconsidering my original opinion of her.

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    • Thanks so much for taking the time to read “The Private Death.” It was about my neighbor, who my husband and I discovered dead in her bed. Just wondered what her last days were like and jotted down my ideas.

      Giselle is kinda’ out there for herself. I’m glad you stopped by.

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  9. Rea Ann Loomis says:

    I like to imagine what Giselle looks like…rag tag gypsy in faded mauve velvet…thanks for sending!

    Sent from Yahoo Mail on Android

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  10. draliman says:

    Great dark ending. And congratulations!

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  11. Dear Alicia,

    What people will take in return for their souls. Well constructed, if not disturbing, story. Congratulations again. Bask in the glow.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  12. That last sentence is a killer! I also like the way you portrayed the different groups of people and what they wanted from her.

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  13. Even the kids?
    That is some price to pay.

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  14. Michael Wynn says:

    Ouch! She seemed so nice until the killer last line

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  15. Dale says:

    Firstly, congrats on being published. I read the story and loved it (couldn’t leave a comment anywhere?)
    As for this one… she sounded so sweet, until the last line!

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  16. A dark and sinister twist, indeed, in that final sentence.

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  17. Ooo, great twist at the end of a great story! I really like the one sentence per line format, I couldn’t tell you why, it just worked for me.

    And congratulations again on being published! It is very well deserved!

    -Rachel

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  18. There are no free lunches are there… a bit of serial Faustus

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  19. Life Lessons of a Dog Lover says:

    You took me on a nice journey, until the jarring end, which I liked, I loved the description of the different groups of people. Congrats on getting your story published.

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  20. plaridel says:

    if anything, giselle was fair. all got their wishes in exchange for their souls.

    congrats on being published. hopefully, giselle had nothing to do with it. 🙂

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  21. gahlearner says:

    To sell one’s soul for a pair of shoes… scary. And she keeps the children’s souls, too…
    Congrats on the publication, I read the story, it’s great. The pov alone stuns me, so well done.

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    • I don’t think they know what they’re ultimately trading.
      Thank you for the congrats. I like working with that P.O.V. And for the death of our neighbor it worked so well because no one knew when she died or what her last days entailed.

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  22. Intriguing story as always. And congratulations on being published!

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  23. Oh my…that was a surprise!
    Perfect for this time of year.

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  24. A woven tale of creepy dimensions. I liked it very much. It goes so well with
    Halloween right around the corner.
    CONGRATULATIONS … on being published; a stellar accomplishment.
    Isadora 😎

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  25. Yes, there is always a price….But there are moments we are ready to sell our soul to the highest bidder and who’s to say what is wrong and what is right…I see all that and more in your story, masterfully done. Congrats again!

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  26. Haunting story with wonderful layers. Huge mazel tov on your publication, Alicia–– so well deserved!

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