The Widow

Posted: November 30, 2016 in Friday Fictioneers
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Another Wednesday, another FF story. Thanks to Rochelle for the picture taken by her husband, Jan, of many, many years. Cheers to them. Evidently they are happier than Florica and her newly deceased.
PHOTO PROMPT © Jan Wayne Fields

Days before the Gypsies arrive in squeaky-wheeled wagons pulled by tight-boned ponies,
Florica erects her tent in the center of camp.
Because the Romani clamor for the things she sells,
Florica stages each with care: dented pots, found necklaces, lost eyewear.
Her hair is askew. Clothes threadbare.
She can’t afford a new dress.
And won’t take one of the three on offer.
Money is dear.
She’s a woman alone now.
Florica likes it that way.
No man to wait on.
Until recently, she had one of those.
She wipes the knife on her skirt.
And places it among her wares.

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Comments
  1. Selling of the evidence… but I guess that she will make it OK.. and I guess that her man was the worst kind.

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  2. neilmacdon says:

    I love the “tight boned ponies”

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  3. Dale says:

    A woman’s got to do what she’s got to do… Florica will make it work

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  4. michael1148humphris says:

    This left me with me wanting to know more. Great descriptions

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  5. wmqcolby says:

    Ohhhhh you just HAD to go diabolical with this, huh? 😉

    Super-duper, Alicia!

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  6. dmmacilroy says:

    Dear Alicia,

    I’m surprised she’s not selling sausages and mince pies. This is a hard woman who knows her mind. I like her and the author. Well done.

    Yours,

    Doug

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  7. Lynn Love says:

    Ooh, that’s good. Love your descriptions, a perfect balance between giving us an idea of place and not overloading us with detail. And that last line – so telling, so ambiguous. Lovely stuff – one of my favourites this week

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  8. Dear Alicia,

    I’m quite sure Florica can take care of herself. Subtly sinister and well written as always.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  9. draliman says:

    I could picture her there setting up her little stall. Then those great last lines!

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  10. Oooo, I loved this one! Especially the last line. Hope she’s happy with her freedom!!

    Great story, well told!

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  11. plaridel says:

    i guess she was moving on. 🙂

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  12. rgayer55 says:

    Perhaps he was a little too demanding.

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  13. Michael Wynn says:

    Beautifully descriptive and nice twist at the end

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  14. Life Lessons of a Dog Lover says:

    Nicely done. I could picture Florica setting out her wares. Didn’t expect the twist at the end.

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  15. granonine says:

    Well, I guess that’s one way to avoid divorce 🙂

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  16. I don’t know if I was supposed to laugh…but i did :/

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  17. Sandra says:

    Strong writing, full of atmosphere.

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  18. Great twist! Well constructed story – I didn’t see the end coming. 🙂

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  19. Oohh very well done. Unexpected end.

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  20. Great build up for the end. I like the right sentences, it keeps you engaged and curious as to where the story is going. I’d like ton know what he did to deserve such a fate!

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    • I was hoping the line about no man to wait on would help show that he was too demanding, and the fact that her clothes were threadbare would show he was not very kind to her. Maybe it didn’t work. Thanks for wondering.

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      • Oh! I did not put all of that together, instead thought that her appearance was from her being on her own and scraping by for awhile. I assumed he was a not so nice one, and wondered if there was a heinous act that pushed her to end it. 😉

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      • It’s hard to get a lot across in 100 words. Sometimes one needs to use their imagination (even I’m not sure what took her over the brink 😉 )

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  21. Laurie Bell says:

    Wooooo i think, maybe, she knows what happened 😊

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  22. I wonder how long ago she had one of those. Great descriptions, Alicia. Good writing. 🙂 — Suzanne

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  23. Oh dear, she is a frightful character.

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  24. Rowena says:

    She sounds a bit too calculating to be a victim. Not sure why she killed him. Perhaps, he complained once too often about the mess, her cooking. Who knows?
    Well done.
    xx Rowena

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  25. gahlearner says:

    You paint a picture with this story, I can see her sitting there, laying out her wares. Great atmosphere, and a woman not to mess with.

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