Photo credit@ Google’s Pegman took a walk in Edinburgh. For guidelines and rules for the What Pegman Saw weekly writing prompt, visit the home page.
“Wanna’ be one of us? Do ya’? Yeah?
Then you gotta’ mesh. Gotta’ fit in.”
Cyril didn’t like the way Weeter twitched his neck
and snapped his fingers between words
as if a song rolled up and down his spine.
But, man, he wanted to be like him.
So Cyril followed him inside.
If he was expecting the smell of shave soap and aftershave,
which he wasn’t,
Cyril would’ve been disappointed.
Instead, the stench of meat and fish assailed his nose
made his eyes sting.
Lights were dim; windows painted black.
Still, when a blade managed to glint,
Cyril thought his heart would pop right out of his chest.
“This’s it. Make yer mark.”
Cyril hefted the knife, balanced it across his palm.
“Do it, man. Do it. Do it. Do it!”
Cyril sliced, quick and sharp.
Weeter pounded him on the back.
“Welcome to the Backyard Butcher’s Club!”
(150 words)
Excellent piece with a spot-on voice. Reminds me of the gritty poems Seamus Heaney would write about his boyhood.
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Thank you muchly! Have a spectacular New Year’s Eve. It’s snowing here in the Pacific Northwest. Magic is in the air.
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That’s phenomenal. Gritty & rich.
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Thanks so very much. And thanks for your help with the code. Happy New Year! to you and yours.
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I feel like these guys is running some racket hey? Anything to be a part of something you know? I think this shop is around the corner from the back door bar I wrote about. I wonder why we all seem to have seen the gritty underground? Great piece.
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I was thinking the same thing. Makes me feel like we all feel as if the residents of Edinburgh are seedy. Not at all! Thanks for reading, Tracey.
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Dear Alicia,
You took me in one direction and then turned the story on its ear. Love it! Great characterization.
Shalom and Happy New Year,
Rochelle
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Hope you didn’t get whiplash! ; – ). HAPPY NEW YEAR TO YOU! See you on Wednesday.
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Naturally I hope before Wednesday you’ll stop and catch my Pegman story. 😉
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Oh! Of course!
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Love this Alicia. Love the voice, the tone, that odd characterisation for Weeter is terrific. And the Backyard Butcher’s Club sounds so unpleasant and dangerous – a mix of Trainspotting and Fight Club! Great stuff.
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Thanks so very much, Lynn. Happy New Year.
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And to you Alicia 🙂
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LOL at the end of this one. A fun twist on the Fight Club meme. Nicely done.
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Thanks for reading! Alicia
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