An Unfulfilled Life

Posted: January 4, 2017 in Uncategorized

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The swirl and grind of life never fazed Annette.
She went to work, hated her job, came home.
She tended the children, as required.
Due to no effort on her part
all five grew into fine young men and women.
Annette observed them moving away.
Never bothered to call them
nor worried if they didn’t call her.

Once slim and beautiful, Annette grew fat.
She sewed larger clothes.
Her hair became limp and dull.
She cut it.

When Annette’s husband said she no longer cooked well
she bought take-out.
She attended his funeral without tears.
Not a soul attended hers.

(100 words)

 

 

 

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Comments
  1. Dear Alicia,

    You’ve painted a brilliant portrait of a woman who existed but never lived.It made my heart ache even though Annette didn’t allow herself the same luxury. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  2. I’m glad you don’t know anyone like Annette. Thankfully, neither do I. Excellent piece this week!

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  3. Sandra says:

    She’s a real piece of work, this Annette. I hope she enjoyed her life, but it didn’t sound like it. Cleverly portrayed.

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  4. Dale says:

    What a horrid existence… And that is what she did. Existed. Awfully sad… Well done and I, too, am glad you don’t know an Annette!

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  5. neilmacdon says:

    I wonder, and this would make another exercise, what was Annette’s one pleasure? Her one saving grace. I know she had one.

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  6. Lynn Love says:

    A tragically constricted life. Never allowing herself to feel too much or love well. Well constructed and very moving

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  7. This is so sad… I cannot even feel sorry for Annette… somehow i feel she could have made many other choices and been much more happy…

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  8. Lish, this story is written in such a stark way, that captures the flat, lifeless world of Annette. Wonderfully told.

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  9. wmqcolby says:

    I feel like I actually lived a life in 100 words. Alicia — BRILLIANT!!! This could not have been ANY better. It is spot on. And that ending packs a punch.

    Amazing!

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  10. plaridel says:

    how tragic. dickens couldn’t have written a sadder tale.

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  11. You are too kind. Thanks, as always, for stopping by and leaving a comment. Cheers!

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  12. michael1148humphris says:

    Such a sad tale, well told.

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  13. draliman says:

    Quite a depressing life you’ve portrayed here. Nicely done!

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  14. rgayer55 says:

    I was going to go to Annette’s funeral, but then I thought, “Why bother? She won’t come to mine.”

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  15. And so it goes….
    like Richard Brautigan or Kurt Vonnegut.

    Life ends. With only a period.

    Nice work.

    Randy

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    • It surely does. Thanks for reading and commenting. I’ve been taking classes to become an aerobics instructor and am way behind in my FF readings. Will get to yours very soon. Happy New Year! Alicia

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  16. A sad tale, well told! Should it be ‘fazed’ rather than ”phased’ in the first line?

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  17. Joy Pixley says:

    What a dull life! Makes me wonder if she was suffering depression that whole time, unable to find joy in all these things around her. Although I do know people who are just critical and unhappy and seem perfectly content to stay that way… 😦

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  18. subroto says:

    It does read like a portrait of a woman going through depression without any support. Nicely done.

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  19. yarnspinnerr says:

    Since 1972, women’s overall level of happiness has dropped, both relative to where they were forty years ago, and relative to men.
    http://www.huffingtonpost.com/marcus-buckingham/whats-happening-to-womens_b_289511.html

    I see many Annettes each day on scootys, cars, buses, metro ……
    Lovey word picture.

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  20. Oh dear, Annette reminds me of quite a few women who lumber and stomp about the place, looking as if they want to kill the world. You certainly wouldn’t want to wish Annette a good day, or she’d most likely bite your head off.
    I guess you’ve redeemed her just a little in the 100 words that follow 😉

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  21. She got lost in life and in the past.
    Life will tug you down but you’ve to keep trying…

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  22. Wow, what a spiral; so skillfully described.

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  23. k rawson says:

    Such a sad story. I wish she’d broken free.

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