An Unwanted Decision

Posted: January 8, 2017 in What Pegman Saw

This is in response to a new writing prompt idea introduced by K Lawson on a blog called What Pegman Saw. We are challenged to write a 150-word story from a picture prompt we choose from a Google map she provides. And what a fun challenge it is!

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Time taps, taps, taps away in the rhythm of
bamboo rods on sand
Not a single plant is in bloom
Still, the scent of flowers fills the air
as Bijli and Promita,
red silk tunics fluttering in the breeze,
dance before Dhirendro
Like two exotic birds, the women have
festooned their glistening black hair with
egret feathers and turquoise barrettes
Their ankles are wrapped in diamonds – Bijli
And rubies – Promita
Tonight Dhirendo is expected
to choose one of these women for his wife
He loves them both,
has since they were children
One is wild – Promita
the other quiet and steadfast – Bijli
Both are beautiful
But the one Dhirendo loves best
isn’t dancing
Doesn’t wear silk, feathers, rubies or
a single diamond
For Sunil is on his knees
tapping
time and hope away
inside the click
of two bamboo rods

(139 words)

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Comments
  1. k rawson says:

    Goosebumps! So rich in sensory detail and then such a twist.

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  2. Really nice. I think I accidentally deleted your comment on my post 😦

    Liked by 1 person

  3. Dear Alicia,

    I love the colors and the music that I can almost hear. Won’t the two dancers be surprised when neither of them are chosen. I know I was. Lovely story.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  4. DebraB says:

    Lovely response to the prompt. Very evocative!

    Liked by 1 person

  5. Sandra says:

    I liked the way the story, rich in every details, turned at the end. Well done.

    Liked by 1 person

  6. A sensory delight in every way. Love is love.
    Tracey

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  7. Dahlia says:

    This is a stunning piece. I am completely blown away. It was like I was dancing with Bijli and Promita, bobbing the hairpieces, jingling anklets, tapping, hopping, hoping, wondering and then the unexpected switch in the beat – brilliant.

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  8. Wonderful sensory perceptions you created. Great visuals.

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