Old Pals

Posted: April 19, 2017 in Friday Fictioneers
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Wow! Wednesday-Friday is here again. Thanks to Magaly Guerrero for the fun photo. And to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields for posting it so our merry band of Friday Fictioneers can each create a 100-word tale.

Me and them shoes been pals for a long time.
Yes indeedy. A long, long time.
Went to our first dance together.
Got married together.
Them shoes took me to the hospital when my Sara was born.
Carried me to the graveyard when she passed.
Yep, we got us some history.
When Burt left, them shoes took me to the bus station.
Went all the way to Kansas together
then on to New York city.
Joined us a chorus line.
Danced until we was both too old.
Got to pack them shoes away now.
We’re leaving for a better place.

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Comments
  1. neilmacdon says:

    Great voice, Alicia

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  2. Sandra says:

    Such a convincing narrative, Alicia.

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  3. Dear Lish,

    I shore do love me some story about them shoes. You done laced up a lifetime right nicely.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  4. michael1148humphris says:

    I saw a whole life passing, happy and sad. Lovely

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  5. gahlearner says:

    The shoes of her life. Great story, Alicia.

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  6. subroto says:

    She has got sole that one. Nicely done.

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  7. draliman says:

    The stories those shoes could tell, the happy times, the sad times… nice one!

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  8. Mike says:

    A great tale Alicia.

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  9. Great story – I loved the voice in this.

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  10. Dale says:

    My comment was almost word-for-word what Rochelle done wrote. So’s I had to change my plans. The voice in this one is fabulous, Alicia! I loved it shorely.

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  11. I love that the narrative is so rich–the speaker has lived such a full life–that when we reach the end, it feels more like a rest… than a terrible loss. I hope that makes sense. Love the language, too.

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  12. plaridel says:

    what a tribute. almost a lifetime in 100 words. incidentally, i wrote something about my sneakers, too. you can read it here: http://wp.me/p6FwZ-QA

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  13. James says:

    “We’re leaving for a better place.” That sounds a melancholy chord with me just now.

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  14. Lynn Love says:

    That’s lovely Alicia – a whole life through the history of one pair of shoes. Really enjoyed this one

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  15. rgayer55 says:

    After I read this, I started humming “These boots are made for walking” by Nancy Sinatra. I love how you used the prompt, Alicia.

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  16. That life story, told in such a convincing voice, goes so well with the shoes as they have such a vintage look to them. Three cheers for a pair of shoes that lasts so many years, but they made things to last in those days. And three cheers to you for that story. I really liked it.

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  17. Life Lessons of a Dog Lover says:

    I agree with all this had an amazing voice. Loved the line “Danced until we was both too old.”

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  18. Them shoes were made for walkin’. YUP … Thems shoes been everywhere.
    HA HA … loved this. It is very, very believeable and perhaps has happened to someone
    somewhere. Great take, Alicia, on the photo prompt. Well done …
    Isadora 😎

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  19. kathywaller says:

    “Danced until we was both too old.” Good for her. And for you.

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  20. amiewrites74 says:

    A life well-lived. Great story, great voice.

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  21. Michael Wynn says:

    Great voice and well written, again. I loved the idea of something inanimate that’s been with us throughout life. I have things like that, things you can never throw away.

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  22. yarnspinnerr says:

    A poignant reminder of times when we did not replace our personal article with a click on the online shops.

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  23. yuhublogger says:

    A lifetime described in 14 lines! Wow! A brilliant take on the FF prompt.

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  24. Sarah Ann says:

    Love the voice in this and the history of wearer and shoes. Very well done.

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  25. A lifetime told from the POV of a pair of shoes, how clever!

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  26. csheldonblog says:

    very nice angle to come from.

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  27. Oh! Awesome! I love the voice in this piece. I can really see the person who wore those shoes….

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