Not For the Food

Posted: May 17, 2017 in Friday Fictioneers
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Today’s picture was taken by Roger Bultot.Thanks, Rochelle, for posting it. I’m sure this scene will inspire many wonderful stories! My 100-word piece about this gorgeous old cafe follows.

Sarah came to the cafe for the sounds
clatter of spoons
rattle of plates
the jingle of laughter and
jangle of that tiny tarnished bell over the door

Sarah made friends here
broke up with boyfriends here
Went away smelling of over-cooked eggs
and burned bacon
and feeling like she’d just left her home.

Home was a mangled car in the yard
home was the sound of the too-loud TV
Mama’s tears
dogs barking
and a faucet drip, drip, dripping

Home smelled of mold and cigarettes
Home was Daddy lying in
her brother’s empty bed
eyes staring at nothing

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  1. Another excellent story.

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  2. neilmacdon says:

    I put that I liked it. Of course, I didn’t. It made me feel I wanted to take a shower. Well done

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  3. Lynn Love says:

    That’s such a tragic story, a diner being more like home than home actually is. Wonderfully done, Alicia

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  4. Very bleak. Sort of lingers afterwards. Great stuff.

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  5. When a greasy diner is homelier than home there is at least some hope… grim reality.

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    • Thanks, Bjorn. I wonder how often this happens. When I was a teenager, one of the many young men I “fell in love with” hung out with my neighbors, sisters and me. He never invited us to his home ~ in fact, I had no idea where he lived. Just a few years ago I found out his dad was an alcoholic and beat him. Grim reality indeed. Hope your eye is repairing as it should.

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  6. michael1148humphris says:

    Great reporting. Which felt like it could expand into a interesting short story.

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  7. Dale says:

    I can so understand her need to get away from such a home. There is so much life in a diner, isn’t there?
    Hopefully, she also finds a way to get out of her situation…

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  8. Iain Kelly says:

    Nice verse, a real sense of the diner atmosphere and the tragedy of her existence.

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  9. rgayer55 says:

    Everyone needs a safe place. Well written piece, Alicia

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  10. All very well done, excellent detail. And the key is the mother’s tears and the father lying in the brother’s empty bed. Excellent.

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  11. Very well done! In a few words you’ve created a character we can all sympathize with.

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  12. Very well done. You have woven a whole life around that cafe. Beautiful writing, as always, Alicia.

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  13. draliman says:

    An escape from a broken home life. Well written! I loved the descriptions.

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  14. Lovely detail, and tragic.

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    • Thanks, Claire. Dawn Landau and I were talking about you on Tuesday night during our critique group meeting – Wicked Women Write. Were your ears burning? We were discussing how we need (yes, need) to read Swimming Lessons. Cheers!

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  15. Dear Lish,

    Brilliantly layered story. So much in so few words. 😀

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  16. Brilliant. Simply brilliant. :o)

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  17. There’s so much to this story and it rings so very true for many sad souls who hang out in places like this day after day, to gain respite from horrendous circumstances. I feel particularly for your character, as she’s called Sarah D: Excellently written.

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  18. At least she found sanctuary there. A superb story.

    Click to read my Friday Fiction

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  19. Dahlia says:

    Wow! Brilliantly unveiled

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  20. Sarah Ann says:

    This started out so nicely – I loved the sense and feel of the opening, wrinkled my nose knowing exactly how she smelt, and got more and more depressed as I read. Well done on working my emotions and giving us so much story in so few words.

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  21. HonieBriggs says:

    This one made me think. And cry a little.

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  22. Life Lessons of a Dog Lover says:

    Wow that story packed a real punch. Great writing.

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  23. Sad. I can understand why she enjoyed going to the diner. Good writing with great description, Alicia. —- Suzanne

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  24. granonine says:

    So much sadness, clearly described in so few words. Good job.

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  25. Thank you very much.

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  26. Heartbreaking and well-told. I’m impressed–and sad, but that’s fair!

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  27. This is very sad. You have told us so much in so few words.

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  28. Michael Wynn says:

    Great verse, very potent and sad.

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  29. Oliana says:

    What a sad but real story. I love diners where you see regulars and chatting. Her home was a dark place to be…she found a refuge. So many possibilities for a short story. I truly enjoyed it as well the form you used.

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