Body in the Boot

Posted: May 20, 2017 in What Pegman Saw
Tags: , ,

Thanks to Pegman I now know there is a border town, Portal, N.D., much like Blaine, WA, which is very close to our little burg, Bellingham, WA. It was easy to imagine a border scene like this.

Alfred feels all raggedy. The way he always does when Wilma’s with him at the border crossing.
Wilma, who never knows what’s in the trunk – ever.
But somehow the way she moves, the way she smiles suggests there just might be a little something to see.
Dumb as a post, almost cute as a button with Betty Boop lips and Marilyn Monroe hair
Alfred loves Wilma. Can’t help it.

“Ah, Mister, ain’t nothin in there. Me and him got a date. See? Reservations at the Electric Club. And we’re already late.”
Wilma winks.
Alfred cringes.
Border-Patrol-Man sighs. “Open the trunk.”

Alfred taps the button that pops the lid.
Border-Patrol-Man slowly lowers his mirrored glasses. “You crazy son-of-a …”
“Officer!” Wilma coos. “There’s a lady present.”
“Toss em out!”

At the Electric Club, Alfred thanks his lucky stars that the odor of five cartons of rotting bananas overpowered the stench of blood.

 

https://static.inlinkz.com/cs2.js

Advertisements
Comments
  1. Oh wow. This is really great. I like the POV and internal dialog, then the pull-back at the end to include Alfred. Tense and funny.

    Liked by 2 people

    • Thank you very much! I had fun writing this. We had to toss out a whole bag of firewood on a camping trip to Canada ~ forgot things like fruit, veggies and wood were not allowed across the border.

      Like

  2. Lynn Love says:

    That border guard had no idea just how crazy Alfred really is! Lovely build up to a sordid little tale and I just love your description of Wilma – what a wonderfully fleshed out little bunny she is. Great stuff Alicia

    Liked by 1 person

  3. k rawson says:

    The interplay of interior dialogue and the playful yet dark undercurrent really make this story sparkle. Loved it!

    Liked by 1 person

  4. Dear Lish,

    You certainly turned that trunk on its ear. Alfred’s a sharp one and so’s the author of the story.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    Liked by 1 person

  5. Sarah Ann says:

    Delightful. Love the description of Wilma, and you had me wrinkling my nose again with those rotting bananas.

    Liked by 1 person

  6. Superb internal dialogues, great POV, a creepy undercurrent just waiting to explode, and great character description. You brought those two chalk and cheese characters alive. Your best piece so far, Alicia.

    Liked by 1 person

  7. James says:

    Well, that’s one way to get rid of a body.

    Liked by 1 person

Leave a Reply

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in:

WordPress.com Logo

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. Log Out / Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out / Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out / Change )

Google+ photo

You are commenting using your Google+ account. Log Out / Change )

Connecting to %s