The Last of Her Kind

Posted: June 14, 2017 in Friday Fictioneers
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Tonight in a town square lit by the moon, the Friday Fictioneers gather to write 100-word stories. Thanks, Rochelle Wisoff-Fields and Dale Rogerson for this thought provoking photo.

 

 

The day had been too long, hours creeping by with the slow tock, tock, tock of her heart. Lizbeth owned no watch, nor could she read the shadows of the sun’s passing. Although she had promised, Mother hadn’t taken time to teach the meaning of shifting winds. And after saying, “You’ll learn to read the waters,” Father disappeared. When brother Paul kissed her, saying, “I’ll return for you,” she believed him, too. Six-year-olds trust so easily.

The day had been full of screams. Now, hidden in the shadows, Lizbeth does her best to interpret the silence crawling across the night.

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  1. neilmacdon says:

    I don’t know what’s going on here, but I know I want to know.

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  2. In the end, there can be only one. Nice job.

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  3. Joy Pixley says:

    That last bit puts everything in a very ominous light, oh my! Great take on the prompt.

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  4. Dale says:

    Poor thing… I know not what is before her but man… she didn’t get the stuff she needed in time!

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  5. subroto says:

    Soon someone will make her tock (sorry couldn’t resist). Very ominous and mysterious story.

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  6. plaridel says:

    oh my, alone, she has to rely on her own wits to survive. i wish her luck.

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  7. It seems like a lot of people let her down. I hope her future is better.

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  8. draliman says:

    Creepy. It sounds like she’s always effectively been on her own. Lots of broken promises.

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  9. jellico84 says:

    oh, the unspoken horrors. My mind is envisioning too too many wars with this one. Great write!

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  10. Dear Lish,

    I felt the disappointment left her by those she cared about most. Wonderfully set scene.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  11. magarisa says:

    Poor little girl. What a scary situation to be in.

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  12. I hope her brother do return… but when and where, I think she will make it.

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  13. Poor vulnerable little thing. I guess her fate depends upon which adult she encounters next — family, friend, or foe.

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  14. James says:

    Spooky. This will not end well.

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    • I don’t think so. This tale must have bubbled up out of all the news about Syria, the movie The Promise, bombings….so many war stories. Perhaps I need to quit listening to the news. Thanks for reading and commenting, James.

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  15. mjlstories says:

    Sad and mysterious. You write the child’s voice/POV very convincingly.

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  16. granonine says:

    Gives me the shivers. Poor little girl, hiding and terrified.

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  17. Life Lessons of a Dog Lover says:

    Wow what a dark tragic tale. Great writing.

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  18. amiewrites74 says:

    My heart breaks for her. I hope she makes it (but I am fearful for her).

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  19. michael1148humphris says:

    The prompt photo has an edge which your writing portrayed really well.

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  20. Sarah Ann says:

    Such tension. I hope Lizbeth is able to interpret the silence correctly and survive. She has lost so much already.

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  21. Liz Young says:

    This reads like the start of a longer story – one I’d like to read.

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  22. Michael Wynn says:

    Intriguing, sounds like she’s been let down by absolutely everyone but surely not intentionally, something is very wrong here. Great cliff hanger

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    • I think so, too, Michael, although I’m not quite sure what … That’s what happens on Wednesday mornings when you only have 1/2 hour to write a 100-word story before running off for the day! Glad you stopped by.

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  23. I could sense her panic by her lack of skills. Your words took me to her fear and vulnerability.
    Heart-rending, yet, poignant considering the world we live in today. Beautifully done, Alicia.
    Isadora 😎

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  24. How frightening for a 6-year-old who can only hide and listen. It sounds like a war or ethnic cleansing of some type. Good writing Alicia. —- Suzanne

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  25. “Six-year-olds trust so easily”..that line ‘bout broke my heart.

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  26. wmqcolby says:

    Eerie. Good atmosphere. I don’t really get what all is happening here, but it still makes a terrific read. Thanks, Alicia.

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  27. Lynn Love says:

    Terrifying to be small and alone, but her experiences have prepared her well. Her previous loss, her mother’s wise words. I think this girl is a survivor. She’ll come away scarred but alive. Really nicely written Alicia

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