The Gentle Goodbye

Posted: August 16, 2017 in Friday Fictioneers
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I fashioned this story for Friday Fictioneers from a Native American prayer my sister copied down for me while our mother was in hospice. It now hangs on the wall beside my writing desk. I find the words very gentle and soothing.

“When you need me, I’ll be there.”
“Where, Mama?”
“In a warm wind that blows your hair; the diamond glitter on snow.”
“But I want to touch you. Smell you. Give you kisses and hugs.”
“Oh, baby, you can. Feel me in a soft summer rain. Smell the earth. Listen to the whir of a thousand dove wings in circled flight. Look for me in each new dawn. And every brilliant sunset.”
“But where will you actually be, Mama? Where?”
“Oh, baby, I will be inside you, draped around your heart. Do not think of me as gone.”

  1. Dahlia says:

    Thank you for sharing this…it is comforting.

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  2. Moon says:

    So touching and beautiful .

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  3. Iain Kelly says:

    Really lovely words.

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  4. I am touched by the beauty of the thoughts you’ve shared in the story. Well written.

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  5. Lynn Love says:

    A lovely, comforting thing to say to a child. Heartbreaking too though. When I think of a parent actually having to explain they’re dying – it’s too awful to think of. Emotional, gorgeous story Alicia

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  6. k rawson says:

    A beautiful ache in this tender story.

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  7. Dale says:

    Absolutely beautiful, Alicia. Thank you so much for sharing this one!

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  8. “Draped around your heart” is such a beautiful thought. We absorb so much from our parents, they underlay so much of what we are. 😊

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  9. rgayer55 says:

    I don’t blame you for having it posted next to your writing space. It’s beautiful and touching, brought back memories of my parents who are gone, but constantly with me.

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    • Yes, they seem to ride right inside your heart, don’t they? My father passed away about two months after my mom. The doctors say it was probably a stroke, my sisters and I think it was a broken heart. They’d been married 69 years. Thanks for sharing memories.

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  10. draliman says:

    Very sweet and quite comforting.

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  11. Jelli says:

    AHO! AMEN! So beautiful! Thank you for sharing. Would love to see the actual prayer this is written from. 🙂 ❤ Brought a little tear to my eye, and a comfort to my heart this morning.

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    • Here you go: I give you this one thought to keep – I am with you still. I do not sleep. I am a thousand winds that blow. I am the diamond glints on snow. I am the sunlight on ripened grain. I am the gentle autumn rain. When you awaken in the morning hush. I am the sweet uplifting rush of quiet birds in circled flight. I am the soft stars that shine at night. Do not think of me as gone – I am with you still in each new dawn.

      I’m glad you liked my post. Thanks.

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  12. Dear Lish,

    Beautiful…simply elegant. Thank you for that.



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  13. Fluid Phrase says:

    This is extremely beautiful. Very soothing. Thank you for sharing this.


  14. Varad says:

    Wow! This is very beautiful. Thanks for sharing

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  15. plaridel says:

    final good-byes are the toughest especially when rendered to a child. well done.

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  16. Laurie Bell says:

    Diamond glitter on snow, draped around your heart. Oh such emotions Alicia. So beautiful, haunting and sad

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  17. I can add nothing of worth to those comments before me. Simply beautiful.

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  18. michael1148humphris says:

    Lovely just lovely,

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  19. Life Lessons of a Dog Lover says:

    Simply beautiful and heartfelt. Love the sentiment in this. Thank you for sharing it.

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  20. Sweet and heartwarming.

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  21. pennygadd51 says:

    Thank you for a beautiful rendering of the prayer.

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  22. So very poetic and soothing and joyous. I don’t miss my father for the same reasons. I can feel he’s with me. Thanks for writing such an uplifting story, Alicia.

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  23. Indira says:

    Beautiful. Actually very comforting.


  24. wmqcolby says:

    Very moving, Alicia. Good adaptation.

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  25. granonine says:

    Beautiful. I love it.

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  26. What a wonderful and comforting exit… yes I think there is something that you leave behind, wherever you are going.

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    • Me, too, Bjorn. I carry Mom and Dad in my heart and think of them often. I always thought that there would never be anyone else who would love me so unconditionally. Now I have a husband who fits the bill. Still, I miss my parents muchly.


  27. gahlearner says:

    The prayer is beautiful and your story makes it even better. Wonderful.

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