I fashioned this story for Friday Fictioneers from a Native American prayer my sister copied down for me while our mother was in hospice. It now hangs on the wall beside my writing desk. I find the words very gentle and soothing.
“When you need me, I’ll be there.”
“Where, Mama?”
“In a warm wind that blows your hair; the diamond glitter on snow.”
“But I want to touch you. Smell you. Give you kisses and hugs.”
“Oh, baby, you can. Feel me in a soft summer rain. Smell the earth. Listen to the whir of a thousand dove wings in circled flight. Look for me in each new dawn. And every brilliant sunset.”
“But where will you actually be, Mama? Where?”
“Oh, baby, I will be inside you, draped around your heart. Do not think of me as gone.”
Thank you for sharing this…it is comforting.
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I love the thoughts in the original prayer. They are soothing. Thanks for reading.
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beautiful
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Thanks very much, Neil.
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So touching and beautiful .
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Thank you very much. Alicia
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Really lovely words.
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Thanks, Iain. I tried to read this to my husband (he helps me edit sometimes) and I started to cry. Not because I’m a super good writer, but because of the memories of my dying mom, her sweet hugs and back rubs. This prayer wraps up what she would have said if she could have talked at the end.
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Thanks for sharing something so personal with us.
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I am touched by the beauty of the thoughts you’ve shared in the story. Well written.
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Thank you. The words of the prayer were inspiring and the fact that my sister wrote them down for myself and our other sister was touching. I’m glad you stopped by.
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A lovely, comforting thing to say to a child. Heartbreaking too though. When I think of a parent actually having to explain they’re dying – it’s too awful to think of. Emotional, gorgeous story Alicia
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Thanks, Lynn. I can’t imagine, either. I’m so glad you stopped by and left such a lovely comment. Alicia
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My total pleasure Alicia 🙂
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Very sweet.
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Thank you.
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A beautiful ache in this tender story.
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Thank you, K. Letting go of a loved one is . . . well . . . I’m sure you know. Thanks for your kind words. Alicia
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Absolutely beautiful, Alicia. Thank you so much for sharing this one!
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Thanks for reading! The light coming around the edge of the bathroom door looked like a promise of something better to me.
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I agree… beautiful take..
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“Draped around your heart” is such a beautiful thought. We absorb so much from our parents, they underlay so much of what we are. 😊
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Well said. It’s too bad it takes so long to realize that fact. Thanks, Christine.
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I don’t blame you for having it posted next to your writing space. It’s beautiful and touching, brought back memories of my parents who are gone, but constantly with me.
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Yes, they seem to ride right inside your heart, don’t they? My father passed away about two months after my mom. The doctors say it was probably a stroke, my sisters and I think it was a broken heart. They’d been married 69 years. Thanks for sharing memories.
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My parents were married 71 years when Dad died. Mom lasted for 5 more, but it was obvious she missed him terribly.
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Very sweet and quite comforting.
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Thanks very much!
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AHO! AMEN! So beautiful! Thank you for sharing. Would love to see the actual prayer this is written from. 🙂 ❤ Brought a little tear to my eye, and a comfort to my heart this morning.
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Here you go: I give you this one thought to keep – I am with you still. I do not sleep. I am a thousand winds that blow. I am the diamond glints on snow. I am the sunlight on ripened grain. I am the gentle autumn rain. When you awaken in the morning hush. I am the sweet uplifting rush of quiet birds in circled flight. I am the soft stars that shine at night. Do not think of me as gone – I am with you still in each new dawn.
I’m glad you liked my post. Thanks.
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Beautiful! Aho! Amen! It think I’ll write this into my journaling bible so I can read it again, and again, infinitum! 🙂 ❤
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Dear Lish,
Beautiful…simply elegant. Thank you for that.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thank YOU!
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beautiful
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Thanks.
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This is extremely beautiful. Very soothing. Thank you for sharing this.
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Thank you for stopping by and commenting. I truly appreciate it.
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Wow! This is very beautiful. Thanks for sharing
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Varad, I’m pleased you came by and enjoyed my story.
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final good-byes are the toughest especially when rendered to a child. well done.
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You are so right! Thanks for reading and commenting.
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Diamond glitter on snow, draped around your heart. Oh such emotions Alicia. So beautiful, haunting and sad
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Thanks, Laurie. I truly believe my parents are draped around my heart. So pleased you stopped by.
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I can add nothing of worth to those comments before me. Simply beautiful.
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Just stopping by has a lot of worth. Plus leaving a comment. Thanks, Keith.
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Lovely just lovely,
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Thank you so very much.
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Simply beautiful and heartfelt. Love the sentiment in this. Thank you for sharing it.
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You’re welcome! Thanks for stopping by.
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Sweet and heartwarming.
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I’m glad you found it so. Alicia
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Thank you for a beautiful rendering of the prayer.
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You’re welcome. Thanks for stopping by. Alicia
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So very poetic and soothing and joyous. I don’t miss my father for the same reasons. I can feel he’s with me. Thanks for writing such an uplifting story, Alicia.
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And thank you for reading. it.
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Beautiful. Actually very comforting.
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Thank you, I think it’s a soothing prayer, too.
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Very moving, Alicia. Good adaptation.
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Thanks!
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Beautiful. I love it.
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I’m so glad. Thank you.
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So beautiful!
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Thank you.
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What a wonderful and comforting exit… yes I think there is something that you leave behind, wherever you are going.
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Me, too, Bjorn. I carry Mom and Dad in my heart and think of them often. I always thought that there would never be anyone else who would love me so unconditionally. Now I have a husband who fits the bill. Still, I miss my parents muchly.
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This is beautiful.
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Thank you, kind sir.
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🙂
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The prayer is beautiful and your story makes it even better. Wonderful.
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Thank you so much.
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