The History of Samuel’s Mom

Posted: September 20, 2017 in Friday Fictioneers
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It’s Wednesday-Friday and time for another addition of Friday Fictioneers. Thanks to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields for posting Sarah Potter’s picture and making us all think. Here is my 99-word story.

 

Samuel: Two-years-old
“Come to Mamma, baby boy, walk on over here! You can do it.”
Mamma: pretty and bright-eyed, dark-haired, plump.

Samuel: Eleven-years-old
“Honey, Mamma hasn’t got time right now. Run along.”
Mamma: thin, tired all the time.

Samuel: Eighteen-years-old
“Look, Buster, I’ve had it up to here with you. Get outta’ my face.”
Mamma: gaunt, jittery, hair matted and dull.

Samuel: Twenty-years-old
“Packed your bags. They’re by the back door. Get.”
Mamma: skeletal, dull-eyed, her hair gone limp and whispy as spider webs.

For the last time, Samuel shut the door against the chemical stench of crack cocaine.

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Comments
  1. Dear Lish,

    Painfully unique and well done. A lifetime in a hundred words.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  2. neilmacdon says:

    That was inventive, Alicia. As Rochelle says, unique and painful

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  3. Oh man. This one is sad indeed. Nicely done.

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  4. This hurts to read… but i find joy in Samuel maybe growing up to be a responsible man.

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  5. Iain Kelly says:

    A harsh life. It seems Samuel did well to get out of it, even if he couldn’t save his mother.

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  6. A downward spiral. Hopefully what he saw encouraged Samuel to strive for a future of fulfilment.

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  7. Sandra says:

    Loved the structure and the terse style of this Alicia. Good one.

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  8. Lynn Love says:

    Awful, awful drug Alicia. A terrible blight on so many lives. Loved the structure of this heartbreaking tale

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  9. bbryanthomas says:

    Ow! That’s a powerful one

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  10. Alice Audrey says:

    Wow, he made it twenty years before ditching her? That’s an accomplishment.

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  11. I’ve seen this, somewhat, I can attest to it’s validity.

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  12. I saw that train wreck coming but you kept me reading and hoping.

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  13. It’s a sad tale indeed but I’m glad you allowed poor Sam to dodge the lifestyle —and the type of men Mom would have hung out with. That’s often where the worst danger comes for kids in those homes.

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  14. draliman says:

    Oh dear, poor Mamma went down hill. I loved the whole timeline unfolding here.

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  15. What a sad story, even though I could feel where it was going, could sense the twist, I had to keep reading, and it still made tears well. You are so accomplished no matter what style you try or invent. great stuff.

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  16. Oh my goodness Alicia, that certainly packed a punch. Brilliantly done.

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  17. Fluid Phrase says:

    Did you say experimental? Doesn’t feel like it at all. Very very well written. Two entire lives charted out. Brilliant.

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  18. ooh that last line. Wonderful

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    • Thanks. I was hoping it wasn’t too much of a “tell” ain’t not a “show.” The100-word limit cuts a lot sometimes – in a good way. It’s made my writing much tighter, that’s for sure.

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  19. Jelli says:

    Shockingly dead-on perfect.

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  20. pennygadd51 says:

    This story makes me so angry, that people will sell crack cocaine knowing full well what it does. You surprised me, moved me, and reminded me of the hazards from which we must defend our children and grandchildren. Thank you for posting the story.

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  21. Dale says:

    My heart broke more with each line.
    Beautifully sadly done, Alicia.

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  22. rgayer55 says:

    I liked the structure of this. Very sad as we watch her slide downhill. My wife’s sister was into vodka and pills. It was heartbreaking to watch her self-destruct.

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  23. Life Lessons of a Dog Lover says:

    Great take on the prompt. I was inspired by his resilience as much as I was disgusted by her weakness.

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  24. plaridel says:

    drugs can do one in. sad story.

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  25. Laurie Bell says:

    Omg this was amazingly told. A terrible story

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  26. Danny James says:

    Scary because it can be so close to the truth for too many individuals.

    DJ

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  27. That is just so tragic and vivid biography of someone ruined by addiction. It happens all too often, and I can understand why someone would rather leave, than see someone they once loved (or still do love) kill themselves. Anyway, there’s no helping a person when they’re that far gone …not usually anyway. Excellently written, Alicia.

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  28. granonine says:

    Oh, the heart hurts. What a sad–and unfortunately too often true, picture of a life.

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  29. Liz Young says:

    A stark reminder of how drugs can kill anything, even love.

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  30. Varad says:

    Maybe, just maybe she realized that she was a lost cause and didn’t want her son to be around her anymore, thereby sparing him. Good one, Alicia. Very dark and powerful.

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  31. Time passes, can’t be returned again, and there’s Samuel’s life…I hope he learns from her mistakes.

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  32. lifelessons says:

    Oh. Sad. A story too often told, I”m afraid.

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  33. subroto says:

    The ending changes it all. Nice one.

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  34. magarisa says:

    Heartbreaking story.

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  35. LucciaGray says:

    Oh dear. This is so sad, but he needed to shut the door and walk away…

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  36. Thanks for meter reading my taradiddle. Oh. Sad. A taradiddle too often told, I”m afraid.

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