Message in a Bottle

Posted: October 4, 2017 in Friday Fictioneers
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Thanks, Ted Strutz, for the thought-provoking picture. I’ve taken this ferry many times and can smell salt air just looking at the water. And thanks to Rochelle for choosing it to prompt our merry band of Friday Fictioneers to write a 100-word story.


Full moon after full moon, our Emily watched and waited.
“I will return,” Simon told her. “I love you,” he’d said.

Her mother shouted,”Scum!” while her father roared,”Ingrate!”

Still, our Emily stared out the window of the house along the shore, rubbing her ever-swelling belly like a magic globe with the power to pull Simon back across the sea.

Years passed, the child grew, Emily’s beauty slipped away. Still, she waited. Our Tansie’s heart broke when she was chosen to deliver the note written in Simon’s hand, “Find another, lovely Em. Our ship is sinking. No help in sight.”
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  1. Dear Lish,

    This put me in mind of a Nicholas Sparks story. Was it Message in a Bottle? I think that’s what it was called. Bittersweet story. Well written.



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  2. Susan says:

    A sad tale, to have waited a lifetime for a man who will never return.


  3. plaridel says:

    what a sad ending. please pass the tissue.

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  4. Dale says:

    So terribly sad to have you life put on hold for nothing…

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  5. neilmacdon says:

    That’s very hard to do – to deliver a story spanning decades in 100 words. You managed it, and I’m studying how you achieved it

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  6. Iain Kelly says:

    At least she has some closure, and the comfort of knowing he thought of her to the last.

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  7. draliman says:

    Very sad that she waited so long. And then eventually (far too late) a letter.

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  8. Jelli says:

    Beautifully sad tale there. BTW, Happy Birthday!

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  9. bbryanthomas says:

    How sad and how well described

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  10. pennygadd51 says:

    Dear Alicia
    You have constructed that story so well! Four tiny paragraphs, each wonderfully fluent, telling a poignant story spanning decades. And that lovely phrase ‘magic globe’ to describe Emily’s swelling womb.
    A beautiful story, and I love it.
    With best wishes

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  11. Joy Pixley says:

    Such a sad story, but as happy an ending as it could be — once she’s waited all that time, to finally learn that he hadn’t deserted her, that he wasn’t the loser her parents said, but that he thought of her with love to his very last. Oh, now I’m getting teary again…

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  12. Varad says:

    That’s very bittersweet. She would have got closure but her whole life had just passed her by.

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  13. granonine says:

    Ach. Such sadness. Poor Tansie, tasked with taking the bad news to her mother. I’m really curious, though, how Tansie got that note?

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  14. Lynn Love says:

    So sad, Alicia. But I do love that rubbing of the pregnant belly, as if her own body is a magic lamp she can rub to make a wish come true – adore that! Might be stealing that thought myself in the future 🙂 Beautifully told and written as always with you, my dear

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  15. I can feel the sadness, yet I would think there is consolation too in the fact that he had not just abandoned her….


  16. That is so sad and yet lovely. She believed in him and was true to him, whatever others said. I’m glad, though, that at least in the end she had proof that her faith in him was justified, however sad the outcome. Beautifully written, Alicia 🙂

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  17. Sarah Ann says:

    So poignant and so much story. I loved the image and feelings conjured by ‘rubbing her ever-swelling belly like a magic globe.’ If only the currents had been stronger, Em might have had a different life. Beautifully told.

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  18. Laurie Bell says:

    Omg… gutwrenching
    Well told Alicia

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