Yep, it’s Wednesday-Friday again. Thanks to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields we have a beautiful picture (provided by Roger Bultot) to stir our imaginations.
I’d like to live the remainder of my life in the rose glow of candlelight.
Somewhere within the shadows bordering darkness and expectation
where the world is neither full of wild desire nor deep disappointment.
There, my children would softly hum accompanied by a choir of crickets
and the thrum of one-hundred bullfrogs.
And fireflies would spark in the midnight air.
Instead, I’m trapped in the bright neon glow of fluorescent bulbs,
held in place by blue plastic tubes twisting like snakes around me,
listening to the thump-thumb of an oxygen pump
while my children softly cry.
Beautifully done
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Thanks, Neil. I went back and changed one of the “expectations” to “desire” after realizing the repetition of the word. I hate it when that happens. I do appreciate your always stopping by.
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Tragic ending.
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Somehow the picture reminded me of my dying mother. She was so sweet and died so slowly. It was very sad. Thanks for reading.
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😦
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It started off so beautifully, what a tragic ending. Well done.
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Thanks, Iain. I was hoping the contrasts would work. I appreciate your comments.
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Very moving. Such a powerful finale, Alicia.
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Thanks, Sandra. I didn’t mean to be dark once again. I guess that just the way my mind bends.
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This was amazingly heartbreaking. Fantastic take, Alicia.
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I’m glad you think so, Varad. Thanks for reading and commenting.
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You spun me in with your lovely, wistful descriptions shook me about with that ending – totally unexpected and tragic. A hint of magic realism, a fantasy world amid the tubes and machines. Lovely writing, Alicia
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Thanks so much Lynn. Your comments mean a lot.
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My pleasure 🙂
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You took me to two different places, with your fine writing.
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Thanks so very much, Michael. I appreciate your input.
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Dear Lish,
I loved thrum of the bullfrogs. Atmospheric, tender and wistful. Also musical as well as visual. Beautifully written.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Shucks, Rochelle, what lovely words! Thank you.
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Ohhh, I sincerely hope I never live long enough to die like that! Great story.
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It’s certainly a tough thing to watch. Thanks, Jelli.
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Indeed, it is.
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What a vivid portrait.
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Thanks, Alice. I’m so glad you stopped by.
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A common wish but sad reality for many. Beautifully written.
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Thanks, Ali. If all of us could just die in our sleep, dreaming a sweet dream.
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Superb.
Story of the week.
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Thanks so much for those kind words. Color me pleased.
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This is so well written and so very sad.
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Thank you, Clare. I really appreciate your kind comment. Sorry to make you sad.
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Exquisite. In the beginning I was thinking, yes, yes, wait there, let me join you… then at the end I was backing away, hands held out. Simple and effective. No reread needed (unlike many this week). I got it first time. I was moved tremendously. First time. Kudos, Lish!
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Oh, thank you! I’m glad the story worked. When my sisters and I were taking care of our mother while she was in hospice along with our father who was going blind and couldn’t walk well, I remember thinking that the music to her death was filled with the sound of crickets and red-winged blackbirds.
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So poignant. So glad you and your sister felt lifted.
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Oh this was truly tragic. Loved the descriptions of what he/she wanted life to be.
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Thanks very much. The beginning of this story came from a line I’d written on a scrap of paper about a year ago. Never throw out ideas, I guess.
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Wow. The beginning is just beautiful, such a magically expressed world. And, then the reality. Well done.
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Thanks, Sascha. I appreciate you reading my story.
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Powerful piece, imagining a more beautiful death than one surrounded by tubes and needles.
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Thanks very much, Joy.
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The last desires of a person who is somewhere they don’t want to be. It’s very sad to see this.
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It certainly is. Thanks for stopping by!
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Oh heartbreaking. Such pain. I yearn with her for the peace of that earlier time
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Thanks, Laurie. I think her wishes were much better than her reality.
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A bittersweet tale indeed. Beautifully written Alicia.
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Thanks, Keith.
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Can’t tell you how much I liked this. Seriously you have a gift with words.
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Thanks so very much!
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oh wow – I bet you spoke for many folks trapped in a hospital bed – enjoyed every wor d
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Thanks, prior! Hospital beds are a blessing and a curse, that’s for sure.
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Indeed – well said
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Wonderful description. Makes you stop and think.
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Thanks. Stopping and thinking is a good thing. Then make a plan.
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Very poignant and quite gut wrenching. It must be a horrible way to go and I hope I never have to face it. Very well delivered.
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I agree with you, wholeheartedly. Thanks, Michael
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Love the images and sound in this – the crickets and bullfrogs. Such a sad tale, not being able to get what they want, and the reality being so harsh.
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Thank you, Sarah Ann.
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So tragic to die slowly with all those tubes snaking in and out of you. Recently, I read about advances in research about medical uses for virtual reality. Wouldn’t it be wonderful if people who were dying in hospital could live out their remaining days in a virtual world of their choosing?
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That would be heavenly! Thanks, Sarah, for a good idea! And for stopping by.
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So very beautifully done – I am in complete awe. Superb.
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Thank you, Dahlia.
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My heart broke reading this. Beautifully done, Alicia.
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Sorry! But thank you, as always.
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🙂
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Such beautiful writing. What a stark contrast between her wishes and reality.
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Thank you!
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You’re welcome.
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