Death Bed Wish

Posted: October 25, 2017 in Friday Fictioneers
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Yep, it’s Wednesday-Friday again. Thanks to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields we have a beautiful picture (provided by Roger Bultot) to stir our imaginations.

Photo by Roger Bultot

I’d like to live the remainder of my life in the rose glow of candlelight.
Somewhere within the shadows bordering darkness and expectation
where the world is neither full of wild desire nor deep disappointment.

There, my children would softly hum accompanied by a choir of crickets
and the thrum of one-hundred bullfrogs.
And fireflies would spark in the midnight air.

Instead, I’m trapped in the bright neon glow of fluorescent bulbs,
held in place by blue plastic tubes twisting like snakes around me,
listening to the thump-thumb of an oxygen pump
while my children softly cry.


Comments
    • Thanks, Neil. I went back and changed one of the “expectations” to “desire” after realizing the repetition of the word. I hate it when that happens. I do appreciate your always stopping by.

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  1. Iain Kelly says:

    It started off so beautifully, what a tragic ending. Well done.

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  2. Sandra says:

    Very moving. Such a powerful finale, Alicia.

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  3. Varad says:

    This was amazingly heartbreaking. Fantastic take, Alicia.

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  4. Lynn Love says:

    You spun me in with your lovely, wistful descriptions shook me about with that ending – totally unexpected and tragic. A hint of magic realism, a fantasy world amid the tubes and machines. Lovely writing, Alicia

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  5. michael1148humphris says:

    You took me to two different places, with your fine writing.

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  6. Dear Lish,

    I loved thrum of the bullfrogs. Atmospheric, tender and wistful. Also musical as well as visual. Beautifully written.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  7. Jelli says:

    Ohhh, I sincerely hope I never live long enough to die like that! Great story.

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  8. Alice Audrey says:

    What a vivid portrait.

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  9. draliman says:

    A common wish but sad reality for many. Beautifully written.

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  10. ceayr says:

    Superb.
    Story of the week.

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  11. This is so well written and so very sad.

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  12. Exquisite. In the beginning I was thinking, yes, yes, wait there, let me join you… then at the end I was backing away, hands held out. Simple and effective. No reread needed (unlike many this week). I got it first time. I was moved tremendously. First time. Kudos, Lish!

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  13. Life Lessons of a Dog Lover says:

    Oh this was truly tragic. Loved the descriptions of what he/she wanted life to be.

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  14. Wow. The beginning is just beautiful, such a magically expressed world. And, then the reality. Well done.

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  15. Joy Pixley says:

    Powerful piece, imagining a more beautiful death than one surrounded by tubes and needles.

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  16. Miles Rost says:

    The last desires of a person who is somewhere they don’t want to be. It’s very sad to see this.

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  17. Laurie Bell says:

    Oh heartbreaking. Such pain. I yearn with her for the peace of that earlier time

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  18. A bittersweet tale indeed. Beautifully written Alicia.

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  19. Fluid Phrase says:

    Can’t tell you how much I liked this. Seriously you have a gift with words.

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  20. prior.. says:

    oh wow – I bet you spoke for many folks trapped in a hospital bed – enjoyed every wor d

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  21. granonine says:

    Wonderful description. Makes you stop and think.

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  22. Very poignant and quite gut wrenching. It must be a horrible way to go and I hope I never have to face it. Very well delivered.

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  23. Sarah Ann says:

    Love the images and sound in this – the crickets and bullfrogs. Such a sad tale, not being able to get what they want, and the reality being so harsh.

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  24. So tragic to die slowly with all those tubes snaking in and out of you. Recently, I read about advances in research about medical uses for virtual reality. Wouldn’t it be wonderful if people who were dying in hospital could live out their remaining days in a virtual world of their choosing?

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  25. Dahlia says:

    So very beautifully done – I am in complete awe. Superb.

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  26. Dale says:

    My heart broke reading this. Beautifully done, Alicia.

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  27. magarisa says:

    Such beautiful writing. What a stark contrast between her wishes and reality.

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