The Progression of Wheels

Posted: December 28, 2017 in Friday Fictioneers
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I’m a little late to our Fairy Blog Mother’s party, but who can resist Rochelle’s invitation with Ted Strutz’s picture on the front? I will be in and out of FF world for a while. I’ve been teaching aerobics at the local Y which is closing at the end of January. In order to continue teaching the ladies I’ve fallen in love with, I must take an online class then a big test. I only say big because it’s been ages since I’ve been tested for anything but getting through life without hurting myself. AS always, thanks for reading my work.

Twin boys rest beside my bed in wheeled bassinets.
My heart breaks with joy.

Three-year-old boys clatter through the house on miniature plastic trucks.
I pray for ten minutes of silence.

Seven-year-olds rumble across the kitchen on roller skates
while singing, “Wheels go round-and-round.”
I roar with anger.

Seventeen-year-olds arrive home with fast cars.
I worry.

Twenty-one, my boys ride down the tarmac in a military plane
headed for God knows where.
I weep until my chest hurts.

At twenty-three my boys return in twin caskets
draped in American flags wheeled down the tarmac in the rain.
My heart breaks again.

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Comments
  1. neilmacdon says:

    Such a clever use of the prompt, Alicia, Almost a poem

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  2. granonine says:

    Oh, my heart! This is so well done, it’s as if you truly lived it. I hope you didn’t. Did you?

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  3. Dear Lish,

    You covered the life cycle beautifully…but oh that heartbreak at the end. Wonderfully written.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  4. Jelli says:

    Oh, dear one, this just breaks my heart to read… and so true for far too many.

    Liked by 2 people

  5. Dale says:

    Oh man, Alicia… you’re killing me today! Beautifully done, no matter how heartbreaking.

    Liked by 1 person

  6. Wow! Such a collage depicting the passage of time. Very poignant tale, poetically related.

    Liked by 1 person

  7. plaridel says:

    this is a heartbreaker. sad.

    Liked by 1 person

  8. Awwwe, what lyrical language and how poignant!

    Liked by 1 person

  9. yarnspinnerr says:

    A life cycle in 100 words. Brilliantly done.

    Liked by 1 person

  10. draliman says:

    So sad, the cycle of life cut too short.

    Liked by 1 person

  11. Cleverly done. A very sad story and so much told in so few words.

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  12. Moon says:

    My heart breaks too thinking about the 23 year old twin boys and their devastated mother.
    Beautifully written, Lish.

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  13. Very powerful Alicia and quite heart-wrenching at the end. I loved the progression from innocence to experience and finally despair and sadness

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  14. This is lovely. Your words have nudged the tears that have been lurking behind my eyes for days, out into the open. Thank you, Lish. And good luck with your testing! Such a lovely intro to this story, too.

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    • I’m sorry you’ve felt tearful the last few days and hope everything is alright. Sometimes shedding a few tears makes one feel better. Yes? I’m looking forward to still being able to work with my ladies. Some are in their early 80’s and rely on my class for exercise. Cheers and Happy New Year.

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  15. I can hear the wheels turning and am reminded of them being millstones grinding you down… so very well written.

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  16. Lynn Love says:

    It was almost as if they were born to break their mother’s heart. You did this so well, from their first moments to their end in 100 words and to make us feel the pain too – wonderful writing Lish. Happy New Year to you

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  17. prior.. says:

    dang – did you have to twist my heart this way –
    but well done! and best wishes on your test – workout teachers have a special heart!

    Liked by 1 person

  18. magarisa says:

    Clever use of the prompt, and such a poignant tale.

    Liked by 1 person

  19. rgayer55 says:

    As I got further into the poem, I feared what might be coming. Very emotional. Well done.

    Liked by 1 person

  20. Sandra says:

    Beautifully done. So graphic.

    Liked by 1 person

  21. mjlstories says:

    So sad! But lovely too.

    Liked by 1 person

  22. Dammit!
    Sorry…your story was provoking.

    Like

  23. Dammit! works for me. Thank you. And Happy New Year.

    Like

  24. I’ve read of a mother who lost five sons in WWII. I’d be inconsolable about losing even one child. They’ve been showing the movie “Saving Private Ryan” on TV recently. I could feel the sorrow in your story, Alicia. Lovely writing. —- Suzanne

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