Greenhouse Day Dreams

Posted: January 17, 2018 in Friday Fictioneers
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I’ve found myself missing the Friday Fictioneer clan so am putting my textbook aside for part of the day and throwing a 102-word story into Rochelle Wisoff-Field’s Wednesday ring of stories.

The temperature reached 95 by noon. And the humidity, Anita tried to ignore that stickiness.
Here, beneath the umbrella trees, the air felt cool. The biting flies weren’t as bad, and the whirring click of crickets was more soothing than noisome.
She spread her picnic. A dingo yipped, a lizard stole a cracker, ants crawled across an apple slice.
None of this bothered Anita, for the ground beneath these trees was her safe place.
Sleep tugged at her eyelids until she finally lay back on her blanket.

“Anita Fredrickson! Get your five-year-old self in here for a nap!”
Anita blinked, the outback disappeared.

Comments
  1. James says:

    Naps are wasted on the young.

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  2. Dear Lish,

    How funny. Being awakened from a nap to take a nap. Good one.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  3. Iain Kelly says:

    I miss when my kids needed a nap everyday – a precious couple of hours! Nice story, I liked her childhood imagination.

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  4. Lynn Love says:

    This is a clever one. We imagine a woman, sitting for a quiet time under the tree then – snap! – we’re in the shoes of a five year old mentallu older than her years. Lovely imagery and choice of language – a vivid picture of the Outback, Lish

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  5. tedstrutz says:

    This was a fun story as I was imagining where it took place… surprise, in a little girl’s backyard. Some of my best stories take place in my mind, now if I could just get them on paper more.

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    • I know exactly what you mean! When I was a kid the neighborhood was packed with kids playing pirate, Robinson Crusoe, cowboys, and Indians (although we weren’t allowed to point our guns at one another), and ballerinas. Ah, the good old days.

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  6. I remember a story of when Norman Rockwell painted a sleeping hobo. The model was his friend Harvey McKee, a man fond of napping. They would work for a few hours and then an alarm clock would go off to end the session, whereupon Harvey would go lie down for a while. One time Harvey fell asleep, so Rockwell turned off the alarm and let him nap. When Harvey woke up after a half hour or so, he was really mad at the painter. “Why didn’t you wake me up so I could sleep?” he yelled.

    Great story. I like the way you capture the heat.

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  7. Ha ha – that was so sweet and the ending took me by surprise.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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  8. pennygadd51 says:

    I really enjoyed that story, Alisha. Completely changing our understanding of the main character from woman to little girl, and of the location from the outback to ‘out back in the yard’ was a brilliant twist!

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  9. plaridel says:

    i thought something would go wrong. i’m glad i was led astray. well done. 🙂

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  10. Ha ha ha ha. So much fun. These parents, I tell you, never let you sleep in peace, forever insisting that you go to sleep 🙂

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  11. draliman says:

    The imagination of the little ones!

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  12. Sandra says:

    That worked well. Nicely done, Alicia.

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  13. k rawson says:

    Oh the irony! I hope she finds another enticing dreamland for the next nap. Such a vividly rendered setting.

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  14. granonine says:

    I love the imagination of this child.

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  15. That was unexpected. I loved it. :o)

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  16. Dale says:

    I loved it. I, too, thought it was an adult taking a lovely pause under the shade. Great turn around!

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  17. yarnspinnerr says:

    Vivid imagery. Looks like Anita Fredrickson may have some fascinating adventures in her nap.

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  18. The wonder of a child’s imagination. Very nice story!! =)

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  19. For a parent’s the important seems to be where you take your nap… sleeping outdoors… you can’t have that.

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  20. Dan Bohn says:

    Anita Fredrickson may become a great writer. Keep that imagination going Anita.

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  21. subroto says:

    Fun story and an imaginative child. However 95 seems so mild. It’s H O T downunder these days.

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  22. Sarah Ann says:

    Wonderful imagery. Particularly enjoyed the ants crawling across the apple, only as an image mind. Anita has one great imagination, and mum one sharp and penetrating voice.

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  23. rgayer55 says:

    What a whimsical piece. Loved it and didn’t feel sleepy at all even after reading the two extra words. 🙂

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  24. How cute. It seems she needed a nap. What a great imagination. Good writing, as usual, Alicia. 🙂 — Suzanne

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  25. Very cleverly told. I love the way it twisted into something far more innocent

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