The Threat

Posted: June 20, 2018 in Friday Fictioneers
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My Dearest Sonya,
I leave tonight. Father drinks too much. Mother constantly cries. My brothers fight in a war that makes no sense. But you know all this. I can’t say where I’m going and haven’t much money but join me, I beg you. Since it is impossible for us to be seen together, I’ll come to the market at noon. Wear a yellow dress if the answer is yes, blue if the answer is no.
Your Raul

Sonya reads a second letter, feels the threat. Slowly she slips into her black dress to signal Raul’s father that his son intends to flee.

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  1. Oh my… sounds like she has made a choice. Very emotional! Well done! 😊

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  2. James Pyles says:

    Oh my. Sounds like she’s caught between two difficult influences.

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  3. neilmacdon says:

    Betrayal is such a hard thing to do without practice

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  4. Dear Lish,

    Oh dear, I have to wonder what Sonya’s thinking. Lots of questions. Well done, nonetheless.

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  5. jillyfunnell says:

    I like the way the colours of the dresses are used as messages. Black seems quite right for betrayal.

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  6. Iain Kelly says:

    You had me scanning the picture to see if I could notice her and what colour of dress she had on! Nicely done.

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  7. Nice tension in this piece, Lish.

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  8. kirstwrites says:

    Wow, a real sting in the tale in this story. Well done!

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  9. Alice Audrey says:

    What could the threat be to make her betray him? Or could he really expect her to run with him? Hmm…

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  10. Munyi.V says:

    What if the family isn’t that bad and Raul is the one with issues he needs to work out? Considering Sonya’s betraying him so easily maybe the villains aren’t the villains.

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  11. 4963andypop says:

    Why is the Tony Orlando song, Knock Three Times (on the ceiling if you want me…) going through my head after reading this story?😊. She is a piece of work, isnt she? Where exactly do her loyalties lie?

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  12. Interesting. The more comments I read, the more I wonder. Straying away from what I thought I wrote! Thanks.

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  13. Dale says:

    I don’t know if I’m happy or sad that she went with his father’s request… unless she felt that this would help Raul.

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    • Therefore “The Threat.” I’m enjoying the questions this story is bringing up. You know how you write something and it’s pretty clear in your mind then people make comments and you wonder exactly where the piece is headed? Thanks for reading and commenting.

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  14. draliman says:

    Oh no, betrayal! Poor Raul.

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  15. Sandra says:

    That’s quite some hold the father has over Sonya. I see you’ve got people thinking with this one – never a bad thing.

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  16. You have certainly got us wondering – you too by the sound of it! Kudos for that Alicia.

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  17. pennygadd51 says:

    I love the way you’ve structured this, and told us so much by not telling us anything (about the nature of the threat and why it was so powerful).

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  18. Jelli says:

    ‘Coded’ attire… I love it! Interesting twist… Sonya the double-agent between father and son… good one.

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  19. granonine says:

    Caught between, the devil and the deep blue sea.

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  20. Evidently she Crayola wardrobe. Whatever happened to paisley, gingham, and plaid?
    Is this the same girl who once wore an itsy bitsy teenie weenie yellow polka-dot bikini? But obviously that would have only clouded the situation.

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  21. Lynn Love says:

    That’s so tragic – that choice she has to make feels so awful, so painful, that threat so dangerous to her and to her Raul – I just can’t imagine what it might be. So enigmatic, so beautifully and sparely written. A lovely mystery

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  22. plaridel says:

    i didn’t expect that ending. what a twist.

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  23. lisarey1990 says:

    That was a great twist Alicia. Didn’t see it coming at all.

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  24. Oh no! I wonder what hold the father has over her for her to betray her love like that. Loved it Alicia!

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  25. Rowena says:

    I like an unpredictable story, Lish, and I really like how you used the different coloured dresses as a signal and the ending to me seems quite ominous. Well done.
    Best wishes,
    Rowena

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  26. There is sadness and happiness here I feel. With hints of betrayal for one and all. These kinds of complicated women I find interesting and am torn between wanting to know more and wary of my mothy wings touching the flame. Nice one, Lish πŸ™‚

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  27. Sarah Ann says:

    Poor Sonya. To be pulled by two sides in this way must be hard. There’s so much unsaid and yet so many thoughts generated.

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  28. Wow, very sinister and threatening. I love the code of the dresses

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  29. A little cloak and dagger in this little vignette, Alicia. It would be great to see where this goes.
    Many, many questions popped up once I finished reading it. Oh, I do hope a new photo next week will give us answers. You naughty gal writing something that leaves us wondering.
    Enjoy your weekend …
    Isadora 😎

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  30. Oh! That sounds a bit traitorous…or else it’s for his own good?

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  31. Laurie Bell says:

    Oh no. What a choice. That last line!

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  32. Dahlia says:

    He would just leave again, some other day, without Sonya. And excellent piece!

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  33. Oh…I wonder what the father wrote. She had a terrible choice to make. The story is full of urgency and tension.

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  34. This has so much suspense and intrigue in so few words. The colours of the dresses do well to ‘colour’ the mood. I wonder why she was left with no choice, and did she think she was helping Raul in some way or was it self-preservation?

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  35. Like the wonderfully concise story telling, the drama heightens steadily. Good story.

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