The Drowning

Posted: July 16, 2018 in Uncategorized

Today Pegman took us to Baltimore, Maryland where I found a little green boat I’d love to be in today. It’s hot for inhabitants of the Pacific Northwest and a wee paddle would be fun! Thanks to Karen Rawson and Josh Hardy for another great place to write about.

 

Yep, the last picture I took.

You old fool everyone knows you see things. And that photo’s so fuzzy just about anything could be floating in the water.
Have some soup, Papa.

She rises up at the strangest times. Sometimes beside lovers picnicking in their boats or little boys skipping rocks along the shore.

Geez if I hear this story one more time, I’ll stab my eyes out.
No soup, Papa? How about a biscuit with jam?

Doesn’t scare me. Nope! Not one bit. Fact is, I look forward to seeing her rise above the waves.

If there is a God, please let him sew this old man’s mouth shut.
Tomorrow we’ll go to the Ness and see what we can see. Maybe she’ll be there. Like hell.

You crazy?

You’re asking me that question?

She won’t rise if you’re there. Your baby sister won’t visit anyone she doesn’t like.

 

Comments
  1. pennygadd51 says:

    Teehee! That’s so good! I like the way you use strikethrough text to convey the woman’s thoughts. The strikethrough makes us see the words as censored thoughts rather than just thoughts. And what thoughts they are! Murderously subversive. Super writing, Lish!
    BTW your story isn’t on the links page. When you paste the inlinkz code into your blogpost, you have to have the post in HTML view.
    So, put in your text etc in visual view, copy the code from the inlinkz page, then click on HTML in the WordPress toolbar and paste the code at the very end of your text. Then go back to the toolbar, click on visual, and lo and behold you’ll see the little blue frog.

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    • Thanks, Penny, I’m glad you like the strikethrough idea. It’s a fun idea I learned from my writing teacher/friend.

      (And thanks for letting me know the story wasn’t showing up on Pegman. I wrote the story late yesterday and totally forgot to add the link so no surprise there! You’d almost think this was my first rodeo!)

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  2. k rawson says:

    Great to see you Lish! Love the subversive subtext via the strikethrough–that is really effective.

    I was thinking the caretaker-daughter was too dismissive. But I have to wonder if he’s all there if he thinks it’s her baby sister. Exactly what has he been doing out on that lake?!

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  3. Sarah Ann says:

    Oh wow. That’s such a killer last line, which turns the perception of this on it’s head. So well done.

    Liked by 1 person

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