Paper Dreams

Posted: January 9, 2019 in Friday Fictioneers
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Wednesday/Friday is here again. Thanks, Rochelle, for posting such a pretty picture provided by Priya Bajpal. My stab at writing a 100-word story follows.

photo by Priya Bajpal

They suggested Anya write wishes on paper and put them in a jar
saying this small action would provide hope.
Selecting the color and texture of the paper
was more difficult than knowing her wishes.
Food. Water. Freedom from pain.
Small comforts. Clean sheets. Crisp gowns.

Every day Anya slipped a wish into her crystalline jar
then nestled a polished shell on top
because Father told her shells carried
luck within their curls and swales.

Skeleton thin, and calling
for water, water, water,
Mother died writhing in pain.
Anya dropped a match in the center of her wishes.

 

Comments
  1. neilmacdon says:

    Dark, but compelling, Alicia

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  2. pennygadd51 says:

    You’ve written a dark and powerful story, Lish. Suffering and death kill illusions very quickly.

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    • They truly do and one can’t explain everything after all is said and done. As my sisters and I said while our Mom lay dying, “What happens on Alcott Street, stays on Alcott Street.” Much love, tears, anger, and support.

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  3. michael1148humphris says:

    If we know love then we know pain. A powerful piece of writing.

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  4. Alice Audrey says:

    It’s enough to make you think that wishes are only for those who already have.

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  5. Sandra says:

    There aren’t many who have a good death, I’m afraid. And along the way there are always those hopes and fears to punctuate the journey to its inevitable end. Sensitively crafted, Alicia.

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  6. Abhijit Ray says:

    Too bad mother died a painful death. Anya’s wishes did not come through. No wonder she burnt them.

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  7. Dear Lish,

    Powerful story. I’m sorry it’s based on your own experience. Hugs.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  8. draliman says:

    Very grim with an even darker ending – the loss of hope,

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  9. I was so sad reading this story, and even sadder to read your comments about your mum. Sending hugs X

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  10. A very powerful portrayal. So sorry to hear it is based on your own experience. x

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  11. I’m so sorry, Alicia, of the sadness you endured at the loss of your mom. Your story is powerful and insightful to the pain and disillusionment one feels after facing loss and suffering.

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  12. StuHN says:

    Wow. That was (sadly) beautiful.

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  13. plaridel says:

    dang, it wasn’t the outcome i’d expect it to be.

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  14. Dale says:

    Beautifully done, Alicia. We can feel your emotions in this one, of course, as it is based on reality…

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  15. lisarey1990 says:

    Very powerful. I’m sorry to hear it comes from such a raw place. Very beautifully told.

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  16. As a member of the astute group known as “They” I would like to say that the suggestion was healthy. Too bad her hopes and dreams were held captive under such a sad and disfunctional conditions.

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    • I would like to think that the suggestion was very healthy (it’s a made-up part of the story as you probably know, gotta’ work the seashells in.) Dying ain’t pretty. Let’s make a pact to ‘go’ while dreaming sweet dreams.

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  17. Danny James says:

    A very touching story.

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  18. subroto says:

    Dark, powerful and compelling reading. Very well done.

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  19. Margaret says:

    It’s hard to get the balance between facing reality and maintaining hope. Your story of the wishing jar and shells showed the difficulty beautifully. I hope Anya can regain her optimism in time. Beautifully told story.

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  20. Lynn Love says:

    That;s heartbreaking Lish. And the worst of it is the loss of hope amid the horror. Beautifully and sympathetically written

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  21. Violet Lentz says:

    That was perfection. What a sad tale….

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  22. Liz Young says:

    Heartbreaking little poem/story.

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  23. granonine says:

    I love the way you took us step by step through hope to despair; once the grieving is done, perhaps Anya will regain hope.

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  24. gahlearner says:

    I feel like a parrot, echoing what others said about your powerful story and the death of your mum. Rituals may ease the mind for a bit, but they seldom help.

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  25. Laurie Bell says:

    Oh dark, but wow such great tension in this one

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  26. That’s very sad, an awful way to go, sorry to hear you and your mum had to go through it Alicia

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  27. Beautifully written, Alicia.

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