Harlem Divorce

Posted: January 16, 2019 in Friday Fictioneers
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Sometimes Daddy resembled a ghost, slotting in and out the door.
Not wanting to be seen.
Other times he was all noise and hustle, bragging about being a man.
Thumping his chest.
Worst times he was a thick-bladed knife, slicing Momma and me with hateful words
until we were ten different kinds of shredded.
Most times he was more snap and shine than sharpness.

Finally, Momma went all crazy. Drew a blade of her own.
Sold Daddy’s car. Changed the locks
and threw his ratty old shoes out the door.
Set em on fire.

Now we got nothing but peaceful times.

 

 

Comments
  1. Great snapshot – great voice!

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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  2. Dale says:

    Don’t think Daddy will be missed…
    Loved the voice in this one.

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  3. neilmacdon says:

    Wonderful voice, Alicia

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  4. Violet Lentz says:

    That was right on. Loved it!

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  5. Munyi.V says:

    I liked it. Was it meant to be a story or a poem?

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  6. Excellent voice in this one, Alicia. I don’t think anyone will miss Daddy!

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  7. James McEwan says:

    How many chances does a man need? Clearly he never understood.

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  8. draliman says:

    That’s one way to subtly indicate that he’s no longer welcome 🙂

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  9. I loved the voice in this piece and the excellent way it flowed. Great ending, burn those shoes!

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  10. gahlearner says:

    Once again you make us *see and know* the people you write about. Great voice, and no, he certainly won’t be missed.

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  11. Jelli says:

    Go, Mama, Go!

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  12. Sandra says:

    Ten different kinds of shredded is a great way to describe the effects of an overbearing partner. Good one, especially the voice.

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  13. Ooh, there’s some family history. Great pace to the piece.

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  14. Liz Young says:

    Mummy did the right thing, even if she did leave it rather late.

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  15. plaridel says:

    people can only take so much abuse before they get back at the abuser with a vengeance. nice piece of writing.

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  16. ceayr says:

    You really nailed this one, Alicia.
    Terrific piece of story-telling.
    (Now I’m wondering who you were in your previous incarnation!)

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  17. Great voice! Well done!
    🙂
    Na’ama

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  18. Great voice again Alicia and great they got rid of him

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  19. Dear Lish,

    Great voice in this. That’s one way to cut off the relationship. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  20. Margaret says:

    I like your word choices to show the destruction and violence they live with. Great voice too.

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  21. amiewrites74 says:

    Good for momma! Good riddance!

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  22. Amazing solution you propose there! 😉

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  23. Love it … really… setting fire to his shoes made me smile.

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  24. When I was in a band we used to play “Hit The Road Jack.”
    I’m sure Mama knows all the verses as well.
    Great job, Lish.

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  25. Laurie Bell says:

    Terrific voice in this one. Scary too. Sounds like momma did what she had to do!

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  26. Lynn Love says:

    That voice is stunning, Lish. And I love your metaphors for Daddy, how sharp and shiny he is, how cutting. Just gorgeous

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  27. granonine says:

    I love the voice here. Also the “Enough is enough!” attitude 🙂

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  28. Great story Alicia. Really well told. I loved how Daddy was all metaphor and simile, whereas Momma’s actions were real, tangible, and final!

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  29. Thanks for noticing the difference between the wishy-washy dad and the take no s*&t mom.

    Like

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