Reflection

Posted: February 13, 2019 in Friday Fictioneers
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Today’s Friday Fictioneers photo prompt was submitted by J Hardy Carroll and posted by our fairy blog mother, Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. I’m deep in the throes of editing my novel so have been absent for a while. But, because we have been snowed in for about a week, I thought I’d poke my head out of a drift and give a stab at a little flash fiction.

In my eyes, your reflection shows nothing more than violence and greed.
What did you say? These are not entities that reflect?
You are wrong. Your violence reflects in the bruise on my cheek, shattered dishes, holes punched in walls.

Stolen hearts prove your greed. Look at your children.
Their sparkling eyes should reflect love given freely, yet, they cower in corners when you walk in the room.

Your heart is colder than stone. Your criss-cross love-hate attitude creates heartache and pain.
Leave us. Leave us now. Before this woman who once loved you, stings you with much more than words.

 

Comments
  1. neilmacdon says:

    Heart-wrenching and powerful, Alicia

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  2. I think he’d be wise to do as she says. What a dreadful situation.

    Click to read my FriFic tale!

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  3. Tragic story. I hope he gives her peace before the inevitable happens. Good take on the photo prompt, Alicia.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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  4. A powerful story, one that won’t have a positive ending if he doesn’t leave. She’s had enough, especially, I imagine, when seeing the damage being done to her children.

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  5. Iain Kelly says:

    Loved the use of the reflections. Well done.

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  6. Dale says:

    Well done, Alicia. Definitely she needs to leave with the kids because these violent men don’t change…

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  7. michael1148humphris says:

    A powerful and well put story, which was great to read

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  8. ceayr says:

    Cleverly done.
    I like how you showed both sides of the conversation with just one voice.
    Powerful and sad.

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  9. pennygadd51 says:

    Dear Lish
    What a great story – you’ve obviously been refreshed by editing your novel (I hope that’s going well?)! And it’s such a clever and oblique take on the prompt too, with the reflections and the hornets’ nest. I love the way you make it so extremely specific that violence and greed have direct, visible, physical consequences. I hope that man clears out and leaves the family to rebuild a healthy emotional life.
    Shalom
    Penny

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    • Dear Penny, I think being away from Flash Fiction for a few weeks helped. Plus, I am deep into editing. I put The Rain Cape aside for more than six months, mulling things over and now I’m on an editing roll. Thanks for asking and thanks for stopping by.

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  10. draliman says:

    Sounds like he needs to get out now. I almost wish he doesn’t so he gets the consequences, but she’ll probably then be the one who gets into trouble.

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  11. James McEwan says:

    Hard hitting warning, from a woman who has had enough.

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  12. I so love your writing, Lish, but it’s here that I first really fell for it. You pack such a punch in your 100 words. The sadness, apathy, the pain is so heavy and beautifully told. I’ve missed your stories; glad you’re back too! xo

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  13. Jelli says:

    Great story! Glad you came out for a visit, too! 🙂 ❤

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  14. Dear :Lish,

    Powerful words. I hope she’s saying them aloud.
    I’m in the throes of writing my novel. Hard to keep up with FF. Glad you came out to play.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  15. There’s a speech which can’t be withstood. “Criss-cross, love-hate – great language.

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  16. k rawson says:

    Love the voice. Hell hath no fury like this woman, I fear. Powerful writing.

    I hope the novel editing is going well!

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  17. plaridel says:

    good for her. finally, she has realized that he’s beyond saving.

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  18. A heartfelt story of how women endure, and how the qualities of happiness are corroded by such abuse. Made powerful because the tone is one of endurance til breaking point. Good writing Alicia.

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  19. You know, violence begets violence. It’s incredible that she’s giving him fair warning.
    Sometimes, that isn’t always the case. I’m glad she’s facing his evil ways and ridding herself
    of him. Have a super weekend, Alicia.
    Isadora 😎

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  20. lisarey1990 says:

    I think the other person should leave. This woman & her children are better off without them. Very, very powerful write.

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  21. It sounds like the mother and children would be so much better off if he left. Very emotional piece, Alicia.

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  22. Margaret says:

    I like how you use the idea of reflections in this. A very dark story of our times, I feel. You capture the tragedy very well.

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  23. Sandra says:

    I love stories written in the second person, particularly when they are dripping in bitterness, rancour and foreboding, as this is. Beautifully done.

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  24. gahlearner says:

    Wow, what a story., powerful, angry, heart-breaking. The voice, the pace, it’s perfect. I love the focus on the reflections, that’s so unique.

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  25. granonine says:

    Excellent writing. So much pain, expressed in language that leaves no room for explanation.

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  26. I hope he takes it as he should and not as the kind of man he was…. maybe he can learn from this, but I doubt it.

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  27. Lynn Love says:

    Beautifully written, Lish and so sad and frightening too. You can feel her dislike of what he has become, her need to be free of him and to free her children of the fear he causes. There’s a threat at the end too and I think he’d be wise to heed it. Well done

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  28. Great description and a sense of great fortitude. Nice one Alicia

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  29. Laurie Bell says:

    Oh this is full of pain. So well written

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