Lake Whatcom Divorce

Posted: July 31, 2019 in Friday Fictioneers
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when we met
you said you would do
anything to get money
in order to take care of me.
you bought me furs, diamonds,
two, no three, trips to paris.

i never asked how you paid.
why would i?
why should i?
i was hopelessly
ecstatically in love.

marriage was never mentioned.
i didn’t reveal
boring, unimpressive tom.
avoided asking if you had a wife
or children.

today, flying high over the lake
you, at last, reveal your secret.

tom, you say, is tired of me.
has paid for everything.
you inform me
the final payment arrived today
then shove me out the door.

 

Lake Whatcom is about a half-mile from my house.

https://www.tripadvisor.com/Attraction_Review-g58350-d2527907-Reviews-Lake_Whatcom-Bellingham_Washington.html

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Comments
  1. Woah! That was brilliant. Loved the ending.

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  2. neilmacdon says:

    Nothing is what it seems at first

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  3. James McEwan says:

    Great lead upl and a piece that tells a whole story. It just goes to show how money and boredom seem to go hand in hand.

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  4. Wow, you’ve managed to convey so much in so few words!

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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  5. Sandra says:

    Way to go, I guess. Such an intricate deception.

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  6. She should have asked more questions. Now it’s too late. A good, well-written story, Alicia.

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  7. pennygadd51 says:

    He took care of her in more ways than one. Re-punctuate that opening stanza, and you foreshadow the murder – clever writing, Lish!
    A brutal, well-written story.

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    • Thanks, Penny. (re-punctuate? How? All suggestions are so appreciated.)

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      • pennygadd51 says:

        Sorry, Lish – I wasn’t implying that you could have improved the punctuation. But if the reader punctuates it as

        when we met
        you said you would do
        anything to get money.
        in order to take care of me,
        you bought me furs, diamonds,
        two, no three, trips to paris.

        then you have the story in miniature. The killer will do anything for money, and uses furs, diamonds and trips to Paris as bait, so he can ‘take care of’ his victim.

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      • Dale says:

        Changing the period to a comma changes everything!

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      • It does! I left it as it is because I thought it fit better. anything to get money
        in order to take care of me: take care of me financially plus take care of me “in the end.” Thank you both for your input. Punctuation is often a ballywick for me.

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  8. plaridel says:

    i feel sorry for her. sad story.

    Liked by 1 person

  9. ceayr says:

    I do hope you can swim, Alicia!

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  10. Dear Lish,

    Oh my. Boring Tom had a plan didn’t he? That’s a helluva a way to divorce. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  11. Dale says:

    I had to read this twice.
    So very good, Alicia.

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  12. granonine says:

    Oy. Was not expecting that! I guess she didn’t mean much to either of the men.

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  13. draliman says:

    It’s easy not to ask too many questions when you have everything you think you want, afraid of what the answers may hold.

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  14. lisarey1990 says:

    So much packed in. Great job!

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  15. Wow, such a great twist. Nicely done!!

    Liked by 1 person

  16. Nan Falkner says:

    Scoundrel – goodness gosh – Don’t sell yourself short – Men really are scoundrels!

    Liked by 1 person

  17. Laurie Bell says:

    Eeerp oh dear. She should have asked more questions I fear. Too late now

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