Today Pegman took us to Ljubljana, Slovenia. While looking at pictures of this beautiful town, I was reminded of the ungrateful me at sixteen when my parents sent me to Europe with my sister. What an opportunity. I enjoyed most of it but was so distraught over having to “leave my boyfriend” who was actually fighting in Vietnam at the time, I didn’t allow myself to absorb the culture. Ah, hindsight. Anyway, here are my 150-words. I hope you enjoy my wee bit of fluff.
“Mom! I don’t want to see another church!”
“What do you want to do?”
“I want to go home.”
“Honey, this is the trip of a lifetime. None of your friends will ever get a chance like this.”
None of my friends want a chance like this.
“How ’bout we get something to eat. Come on.”
“The hotdog I ate last night made me puke.”
“I think that was the ride on the boat, not the Kranjska Klobasa.”
“Whatever.” Dad has taken me sailing for the last twelve years. I doubt a boat ride was the problem.
“We could go to the square to see that statue Valbotg told us about last night.”
“I will stab my eyes out if I see another marble statue. Mom! Really?”
“Think of something, anything you’d like to do. Anything.”
Oh! Wait! Look at him. Look. At. Him. “Let’s rent some bikes!”
Really excellent voice in this. I like how you utilize the strikethrough. I like doing a story that’s all dialog once in a while, too. It’s tricky, but you really pulled it off. Bravo.
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Thanks! I love the strikethrough thing. Makes dialogue fun.
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Oh boy, I’ve got 2 1/2 teenagers and that really captures that teen attitude. Let’s hope they gain your hindsight eventually!
Though you were missing your boyfriend, technically speaking, you were about the same distance away…
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I’ve never had kids but I remember being a real snark as a teenager. I once told my parents I was glad they never sent me to military school – which they actually threatened to do at one time.
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I, too, liked the strikethrough as a means of expressing your narrator’s unspoken thoughts. And your story is very true to life. Maybe things will go more smoothly now she’s realised there’s attractive men in Ljubljana!
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Thanks, Penny!
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It’s been a long time since I was a teenager but boy, that sure brings back the attitude I remember!
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