Posted: April 26, 2020 in What Pegman Saw
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Charles – Explorer

August 11, 1861
Bathed in rosy light, the mountain’s noble brow gleams in the glory of the setting sun. Beyond the jagged outline of the eastern peak, which rises abruptly from a gentle incline, lies a rough, almost horizontal platform. 3000 feet lower, like the trough between two mighty waves, rests the saddle separating the sister peaks.

August 15, 1861
The trough is all that hinders me, but what an all! Snow at eye level. Clouds above. White upon rocks and sky. Shining masses, looking like newly-washed sheep!  I cannot describe the sensations thrilling my heart. Knowing my caravan of men will keep me safe, I must continue. For God. For country.

Johannes – Preacher

August 18, 1861
We are in the midst of Chagga thieves, trickish men, who only desire our property. My single earthly friend disappeared after striving to reach the mountain’s peak with a caravan consisting of local thieves. God bless his soul.

  1. k rawson says:

    Please write this book. Love the voice! Great to see you, Lish.

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  2. Dear Lish,

    What a story you told between the two journals. Well done. I agree with Karen. Write the book. 😀



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  3. Fantastic language here. You really capture the era while retaining the excitement of the scene. Well done.

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  4. Lynn Love says:

    I agree with all the above! Fabulous voices and it would be fascinating ot see hoe the bigger story continued through these two journals, or more perhaps. Love it

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  5. Joy Pixley says:

    Interesting juxtaposition of the explorer’s joy at seeing the beauty of nature, and his trust in his companions, and the priest’s conviction that the locals are thieves. Makes me wonder who is correct, and whether Charles has truly met with harm or is simply delayed in his return. The period language lends such an authentic air to the diary entries, and it all hints at so much more of a story — well done!

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  6. Cara Hartley says:

    A cliffhanger adventure in 150-ish words. I love the diary approach!
    ~Cie from Naughty Netherworld Press~


  7. pennygadd51 says:

    You differentiate nicely between the two characters. The period feel is great, and not stilted; you convey the excitement of the explorer at the natural wonders surrounding him, which isn’t easy while sticking to a period voice. Good story, Lish!

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