Outside Looking In

Posted: April 29, 2020 in Friday Fictioneers
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Sophia stands knee-deep in snow
clad in a once-elegant
now raggedy, red-velvet cape

she has occupied that table
no, no, not the corner table
that one is saved for people in love
the other table
the one set for four

when she and Thomas were together
there were never four
just him
just her

him bringing blue sapphire rings
capes of velvet
her carrying hopes, dreams
and laughter

champagne flavored kisses
nights of love so strong it made her hurt
inside and out

but now, tonight
he’s laughing with his wife
and two children
creating a balanced table of four

Comments
  1. Dale says:

    Poor fool – if I am to assume she had an affair with a married man. Or is it that she didn’t make it to wife status but this other woman did… Either way, time to move on, Chickie!

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  2. neilmacdon says:

    That’s beautful and sad

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  3. msjadeli says:

    My heart goes out to her. A sweet-talking swine stole her heart.

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  4. That could go either way. Either they were cheating (not the least bit good), or someone else has one him over (legitimate though sad)

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  5. Dear Lish,

    it’s sad for the other woman. In my opinion the man who cheated is lucky to have a forgiving wife. Well written verses. I stuck the cards in the mail yesterday. Hope you enjoy them.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  6. I didn’t read this as a mistress and her lover, but as a couple who went their separate ways. Either way, it’s a poignant story.

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  7. Iain Kelly says:

    Ouch, a gut blow at the end. Sad, but beautifully written.

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  8. plaridel says:

    tough situation to be in. you have described her pain very well.

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  9. Did she know he was married when their table left two seats open? I wonder whether she had, and if he was married then, she is better off without him. At any size table. …

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  10. 4963andypop says:

    You can feel her imbalance.

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  11. mjlstories says:

    A sad tale. I hope she moves on. You can’t live on champagne kisses…

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  12. Laurie Bell says:

    Oh this is very sad. There are always those hurt in an affair. Nicely told from the other side

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  13. wmqcolby says:

    Didn’t see that ending coming. Convoy took a hit on that one! You really gave us a great lesson in writing details using economy. Five out of five “Check, please”s.

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  14. maria says:

    Oh a lyrical story…

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  15. granonine says:

    Ugh. Move AWAY from the window, wrap your raggedy cape around you, and quit living in the past. There are better days ahead!

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  16. Liz Young says:

    It’s never a comfortable state, being the other woman.

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  17. pennygadd51 says:

    Well, the closing scene is a happy, balanced family enjoying an evening out watched by a stalker who’s living in the past. If he had an affair with her and ditched her, he did her wrong for sure, but it looks as though he knows how to build a marriage. She, on the other hand, is fixated on what she once had. What a sad story, Lish!

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  18. I once knew a poor girl who lived in hope her boyfriend would leave his wife. Whatever we said wouldn’t convince her and she waited in vain.

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  19. draliman says:

    I wonder if she’s an ex or an ex “other woman”? Either way, time to move on.

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  20. Sandra says:

    It’s an all too familiar scenario. Sometimes it ends well. Most times it doesn’t. And sometimes it doesn’t even end well when you think it’s ended well. Nicely done, I liked the phrasing.

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  21. Great story/ poem Alicia- love shape of it, no word wasted, saying so much. The beginning is clever, bringing our attention right into the here and now to the two tables.

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  22. Oh no… it never works with a married man…

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  23. Nan Falkner says:

    JERK! He’s throwing his happiness in her face. So very sad and a movie in a story!

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  24. Nan Falkner says:

    Oh, I feel sorry for her! It has to be gut-wrenching to witness their happiness and now they have children. Sad story, but well written!

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  25. wmqcolby says:

    Ohhhhh, SNAP! That hit like a hammer! Especially in this day and age of human trafficking, this packed a wallop. Whoa!

    Like

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