Silence

Posted: May 13, 2020 in Friday Fictioneers
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“Samoa-Samoa-Tonga-Tonga-Talofa-Malo-Aloha.”
At the age of three, Clara was a musical prodigy, at five she spontaneously burst into song as if the family lived inside a musical.
“Hey, baby, why don’t you run over and pick out a T-shirt for daddy?”
Clara met the suggestion with an eye roll before skipping away.
Anita watched her daughter’s long blonde curls bounce against her tiny back, did her own eye roll thanking God for the blessed silence as her child disappeared in the crowd.

The blessed silence has gone on for two excruciating years. And now, today, the search for Clara was ended.

Comments
  1. Iain Kelly says:

    Wow, sucker punch ending. Powerful and effective, well done.

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  2. neilmacdon says:

    Be careful what you wish for. In spades

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  3. notestowomen says:

    Didn’t see that ending coming. Very powerful.

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  4. Dear Lish,

    Poignant and powerful. I’m a little confused by Tonya…was that supposed to be Clara?

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  5. Dale says:

    Oh! I had to read this twice!

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  6. granonine says:

    Nonononono! I’m picturing this adorable, if noisy, child with her golden hair bouncing, and then POOF! Gone. Leaving two of the most broken-hearted parents you can imagine. Good writing, but boy it’s sad!

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  7. msjadeli says:

    I really really hope she was found alive. This story has a raging karmic bite to it.

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  8. Fatally effective, the ending. Be careful what you wish for. A life superbly told in 100 words.

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  9. plaridel says:

    i suppose it didn’t well. a very sad story.

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  10. Brutal last lone from family fun to horror in just 100 words. Anita will be wracked with guilt for the rest of her life.

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  11. Sandra says:

    Well you certainly delivered a twist at the end there, Alicia. Not what I was expecting at all.

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  12. draliman says:

    Such a sad ending. Beautifully told.

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  13. The way you built this story, keeping things sweet & light before socking me in the jaw was such a shock – as I’m sure you intended. Well done.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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  14. James McEwan says:

    A sad warning and tale that is felt by everyone – What a terrible world at times.

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  15. Varad says:

    whoop! that was some ending. a right hook that came out of nowhere.

    Like

  16. pennygadd51 says:

    Dramatic and so sad. Maddie McCann springs to mind. Parents need to be so watchful.

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  17. ceayr says:

    Ouch!
    Brilliantly brutal, Alicia, masterful punch line.

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  18. michael says:

    A grim tale that reminds us to treasure every day,

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  19. Damn woman! I don’t need this now…I need sunshine and rainbows.
    Heartbreaking story.

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  20. Excellent, powerful ending.

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  21. Wow Alicia – that was a real sting in the tail. I was lulled by the theme of the precocious child.

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  22. Nobbinmaug says:

    The ending gave me chills. I was drifting along thinking she could be my kid. Far from a prodigy, I’m always making up little jingles. Then… Damn!

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  23. Tannille says:

    Wow what a shocking and horrific ending. Good job.

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