Baggage

Posted: October 30, 2020 in Uncategorized
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When my heart shatters like a single mussel shell beneath your angry words and I fall to my knees and cry for mercy, kindness, forgiveness, a gentle hand or a whispered I love you, will you be there, not to shout questions or offer unneeded advice but to gently lift me up and guide me, not to your home or mine but to a place of warmth and softness where our baggage of discordant history has no place and the sound of children’s laughter brings delight instead of angst?

Comments
  1. draliman says:

    A heartfelt plea. I fear he won’t be there.

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  2. Dear Lish,

    Now that’s one long sentence. 😉 Well written and I hope the answer is yes.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  3. neilmacdon says:

    I loved the image of the heart as a mussel shell

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  4. HonieBriggs says:

    What a terrific and completely unexpected take on the prompt. I love it.

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  5. bearmkwa says:

    Awesome! Had me hanging on every word! We all need that place of solace every now and then, eh. Glad to see you here this week. 😻

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  6. Iain Kelly says:

    I wonder if there is anyway to answer that question until the situation arises. Good take.

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  7. plaridel says:

    i think it’s an exercise in futility. she already knows the answer, doesn’t she?

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  8. Tannille says:

    A common plea. Poetically written.

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  9. Wow, that’s one long sentence. I get the impression he’s not the gentle kind. She’ll be forever walking on eggshells, dancing on broken glass.

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  10. msjadeli says:

    Impressed that you managed the story in one sentence. When you have to wonder if they will be there, I think you already know the answer to the question. Good story but sad reality.

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  11. pennygadd51 says:

    That’s beautifully written, Lish. I love the imagery. I love the way you wrote it as a single sentence. I agree with what you say in a comment, you hoped that by writing the whole story in a single sentence the desperation would come through. Well, you were right and it does. It’s really exciting when you try something experimental and it works. This is a lovely story despite the tragic content.

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