The Coup

Posted: June 10, 2015 in Friday Fictioneers
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Raina Ng’s delightful photo and an article on NPR this morning inspired today’s 102 word story. Somehow they seemed to mesh. Kitche picture prompt Aila’s kitchen is quiet. She snugs into her silk dress and matching satin pumps, lights the paper lanterns and opens the door to her guests. How she loves the sound of laughter, the clink of crystal, the glorious tales her friends tell. Children race through the house of twenty rooms, their shrieks cause no disruption. Midnight comes. Goes. Where is my Raul? Aila wonders. The door bursts open, “The president has been shot! Come, Aila! They are searching for you!” Ten days later Aila lives in a migrant camp. What remains of her life? Six kids and an orange party dress.

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  1. Sounds like Alia has a bit of a riches to rags story going on.

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  2. Tough and not far removed from things that are happening in the world right now. And those refugee camps seem like hell!

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  3. yarnspinnerr says:

    life is unpredictable. Great take.

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  4. Vinay Leo R. says:

    From a party one moment to a camp the next. Life’s turns are such. Sad.

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  5. That’s really too bad they were searching for her because the President was shot, then put her in a migrant’s camp, for no reason! This is a wonderful story Alicia!

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  6. Sandra says:

    And so it changes, all in a matter of hours. Great take on the prompt.

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  7. ansumani says:

    Life can indeed change in a minute. Nice story.

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  8. From all to nothing in an instant… Having to leave in an instant… I think it happens when tables turn.. but the six children is maybe the most important.

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  9. Life really can happen that quickly.

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  10. plaridel says:

    hopefully, she can start life anew somewhere, someplace for the sake of the children.

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  11. Horus says:

    Time hides so many surprises in its fold – no one knows whats coming next ! Nicely done!

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  12. rgayer55 says:

    I hate when that happens. No one is going to feel sorry for her or the children, and I imagine it’s certainly difficult to flee in terror while wearing pumps. You set the stage extremely well before pulling a 180 on us. Great job, Alicia.

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  13. draliman says:

    One minute happy and well-off, the next in a camp. Terrible how things can change just like that.

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  14. That took a shock turn!

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  15. Powerful story–so rich in wonderful detail and then, snap! Everything is so stark. Just like reality. You aced this one, for sure!

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  16. A little scary, original, and nicely done! 🙂

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  17. Wow, life does turn on a dime doesn’t it? Thanks for the background of your idea. We live close to the edge to, but the fall wouldn’t be as far, we don’t have a 20 room house. But any fall would be devastating. I hope the people in your story find a new happiness and success.

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  18. Who knows what tomorrow might bring?

    Visit Keith’s Ramblings!

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  19. Amy Reese says:

    Wow, that’s quite a story, Alicia. I love listening to NPR. You just never know what you’ll learn or how you’ll be inspired. Life can change in a heartbeat, can’t it? Very written and crafted story. I like how you ended with the dress and the kids. That worked really well for me.

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  20. subroto says:

    Life does change in an instant even for the powerful people. At least she has her children with her. Poor Imelda Marcos had to leave her shoes behind.

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  21. Dear Alicia,

    Powerful story and a reminder of how life can turn on a dime. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  22. Margaret says:

    Yor story really made me think about how precariously balanced life can be. We might not fall from presidential palaces to refugee camps like Aila, but we never really know what each moment might bring. I’m glad she still has her dress and shoes. They’ll either keep her hopes up or remind her not to take good fortune for granted. Well told, Alicia.

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  23. Good story, Alicia. We’re blessed if we live in a place where there’s no great political unrest. Some people’s lives are so uncertain. Poor family. Well done. — Suzanne

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