Read the Table

Posted: February 7, 2018 in Friday Fictioneers
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I know ya’ll will think this real queer, but Netta jotted a note next to every wine stain on her tablecloth. Used a Sharpie; make it stick.

Weddin’ night 5/21/68
Mama passed 7/18/68
Baby stillborn 3/21/70
Bought me a rowboat. Waaaa-hoo!!! 8/20/70
For why did Hank shoot Boomer-the-Mutt? 6/1/71
Floozie in our house!!! 1/1/72
Hank done punched me!!! 3/12/73
Bought me a new fry pan, feelin’ better 3/15/73
Damn! Punched me again! 12/24/73
Walloped s.o.b. in the head Mary Merry Christmas.  12/25/73
s.o.b ain’t movin.’ 12/26/73
Real nice row in the swamp today 12/27/73

I’m tellin’ ya, read the table. Them dates is scattered, but the truth is in there. Guarantee.

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Comments
  1. James says:

    Sounds like he was asking for it.

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  2. Dale says:

    It’s right there in black and white and wine… he done deserved it real good.

    Liked by 3 people

  3. Glad she bought that frying pan. =)

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  4. Iain Kelly says:

    I hope she destroys it before the police come looking round. Great idea.

    Liked by 1 person

  5. neilmacdon says:

    Inventive,Alicia, so inventive

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  6. Jelli says:

    That was…. well… something my Mom would have done had we a tablecloth or sharpie. For her, it was keys… every key had a memory, a man, a bar, a car, etc. etc. So darn heavy to carry away when she died. Somehow, can’t bear to part with them, especially the ones that were her and Daddy’s “special” keys.

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  7. Wow, that was a brilliant read. I loved the ‘voice’ in this. Well done.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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  8. plaridel says:

    the tablecloth will be a fitting heirloom someday. somebody better take care of it. 🙂

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  9. wildchild47 says:

    LOL – maybe I shouldn’t be laughing at the harshness of some of the hard aspects jotted down here, but the voice, the tension, and the end results are just priceless. Well done and what a great twist of inspiration from the prompt!

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  10. yarnspinnerr says:

    An innovative narration – very impressive.

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  11. Lynn Love says:

    What a great story this is, from the inventive set up to the voice, to the gradual build of events to the nice row through the swamp. Really terrific and my favourite of the week.

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    • Oh! That makes me so happy! Thanks! 🙂 Just before I fell asleep one night I thought about someone tracking their life through wine stains. I’m glad I jotted it down before I fell asleep.

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      • Lynn Love says:

        I’m glad you did too! That’s my failing, writing ideas down that come as I’m about to doze off, or ones that come in the middle of the night. You think you’ll remember but you never do. It’s a good discipline to have

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  12. pennygadd51 says:

    I love the structure you’ve devised for this; so ingenious. And the voice is just great. A little gem of a story Alicia!

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    • Thank you, Penny.Just before I falling asleep one night I thought about someone tracking their life through wine stains. I’m glad I jotted it down. I’d never have remembered it in the morning.

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  13. draliman says:

    I had a feeling when the frying pan came after the first punch it and Hank were going to get acquainted. Nice one!

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  14. Dear Lish,

    There’s a man what needed killin’. Ma knew how to keep a journal. Good one!

    Shalom

    Rochelle

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  15. This is so original and quirky. Love the voice

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  16. Cecilia says:

    Oh, the truth is in there alright ….!

    Liked by 1 person

  17. He had it coming. Sometimes a girl just needs a frying pan.
    Tracey

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  18. Love that- could make an excellent novel…

    Liked by 1 person

  19. Love the story love the style, Alicia. Delightfully different and welcomely so!

    Liked by 1 person

  20. granonine says:

    Sad and funny at the same time. Well done.

    Liked by 1 person

  21. prior.. says:

    sho did dish this out – to reap what he be sewing….
    ha

    Liked by 1 person

  22. Moon says:

    Absolutely brilliant!
    Such a lot of story in just 100 words.
    I loved the jumbled number pattern that was really unique too.

    Liked by 1 person

  23. Sarah Ann says:

    So clever the way you told this. Netta has had a hard life and Hank was asking for it. I hope Netta enjoyed all subsequent rows in the swamp.

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  24. Dahlia says:

    A unique example of show dont tell – awesome!

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  25. Sometimes it only takes a single note to draw the conclusion…

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  26. AND … yet, another use for wine. Stains to locate just where our lives are going.
    Hubby wasn’t going anywhere too soon. Hopefully, his head stained the tablecloth too.
    Isadora 😎

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  27. What an imaginative way to record events, cryptically and in the voice of the woman. Liked that she wrote next to the wine stains !

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