Lost Chances

Posted: May 2, 2018 in Friday Fictioneers
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Photo by K. Rawson

We remember the clatter of boots on steps, the boyish shouts and the click-clack of swords made of sticks.
Our eyes still see flashes of red, purple and orange T-shirts as the boys scattered through the woods.

The tips of our fingers long to brush back silken hair and peer into eyes of blue or green and see,
really see
what they wanted.
Just give us the chance.

But those times are lost.
They didn’t know what they wanted so they took what was given.
Now our boys linger in pools of sorrow with hollow eyes,
waiting for feelings of euphoria and ecstasy.

Comments
  1. Jelli says:

    Wow, sounds like those boys definitely took the wrong set of stairs to their future…but, the can still be saved…at least, I hope so. 🙂

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  2. neilmacdon says:

    Brilliant line “They didn’t know what they wanted so they took what was given”

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  3. James says:

    I wrote a story sometime ago based on the real life tragedy of drug addiction in West Virginia. This reminds me of it somewhat.

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  4. Iain Kelly says:

    A tragic turn of events, and every parents nightmare.

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  5. Dear Lish,

    Oh the ‘what-might-have-been’s’. Lovely piece, poignant and beautifully illustrated with words.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  6. athling2001 says:

    Poetic and sad. Well done.

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  7. Lynn Love says:

    So sad, Lish. Often when I pass drunks of homeless people in the street, I wonder what they were like as children – were they loved and cossetted but fell on hard times or were they given the roughest start, never truly cared for, their fate almost inevitable. You capture that sadness, the loss of potential in any human life. Beautiful

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    • I do the same thing, Lynn. Once I saw a very elegant-looking black man in front of the mall I never go to (I was just driving by). He was dressed in a worn suit and selling balloons. What the heck? My mind went into overdrive, trying to figure out what had happened. Thanks so much for reading and leaving a reply. Lish

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  8. Beautifully written! So powerful – I loved reading it.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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  9. Loved the style of this piece

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  10. k rawson says:

    I read this with such an ache. Loved especially “They didn’t know what they wanted so they took what was given.”

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  11. Joy Pixley says:

    Those last lines are so touching — “they took what was given” — ouch: great contrast with the innocence of the beginning.

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  12. lisarey1990 says:

    Beautifully poetic and very tragic.

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  13. Sandra says:

    So very poignant. The ‘brushing back of silken hair’ whilst staring into their eyes is heart-rending and so very realistic. Well done, Alicia.

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  14. draliman says:

    A happy and fun childhood becoming a nightmare present. Quite chilling.

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  15. Growing up is not all what it is made out to be.

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    • Remember when you couldn’t wait to turn twelve, then get a job, and start to drive? Then, all of sudden, you’re driving to work and it’s not as much fun as you expected? Thanks for reading.

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  16. pennygadd51 says:

    There are many delights in your story, Alicia, not least the way you have used elements of the prompt as a part of your storyline for example ‘pools of sorrow’. Lovely writing!

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  17. James McEwan says:

    I like the nostalgia in this, wishing for a return to those youthful days. Emotional and true.

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  18. Beautifully haunting! Love the story! Well done! 🙂

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  19. Dale says:

    This was heartbreaking. LIke the others, I loved your phrasing and, as a mother, cannot help but wonder if I ever looked deep enough into my sons’ eyes…

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  20. Laurie Bell says:

    Whoa, I hope they can be ‘found’ one day
    A scary truth

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  21. gahlearner says:

    What a powerful twist. Such hopelessness after that contemplative, tender beginning. Great writing, Alicia.

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  22. Dahlia says:

    The despair the hopelessness…excellently penned.

    Like

  23. Beautifully written but so so sad.

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  24. Varad says:

    Very evocative writing, Alicia. Seems like the boys have lost their way.

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  25. yarnspinnerr says:

    Great write. I suspect there are layers which I may have missed.

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  26. jillyfunnell says:

    Beautiful, subtle piece. Outstanding, Alicia.

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  27. Now this is the Lish I know and love. Brilliant story. So sorbet… subtle! and well-crafted and meaningful. Oh how I have missed your prose.

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  28. Liz Young says:

    Guess those boys made some bad choices. This is infinitely sad – well done.

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  29. granonine says:

    Oh dear. Not the hoped-for ending. How terribly sad.

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  30. A sad, haunting tale. Today’s drugs are much worse than in my youth–and believe me, I tried many of them.

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  31. Nan Falkner says:

    Such a sad ending after the hopeful beginning. I have empathy for all of the parents who lose their children to drugs and am fearful there isn’t a way out of the opioid epidemic. This was an excellent and thought provoking story Alicia!

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  32. Those last few lines are so powerful. Beautifully told.

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  33. Sarah Ann says:

    This had such a positive and colourful start – I could see the boys playing in the woods. Now I fear they live just waiting for their next fix.

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  34. wow! So beautifully written, poetry.

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  35. This makes me think of drug addiction, so sad.

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  36. Reflective and compelling. Good story.

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