Susana stands stiffly, watching people run to the water’s edge, and return.
Each picks up a stone or bottle fragments polished by wave-driven sand.
Some discover Japanese glass floats in blue or green.
Others find pearls tucked inside broken half-shells. And squeal.
They have no idea they are stealing when they slip her treasures inside their backpacks.
Still, their ignorance makes her angry.
She conjures wind that whips sand, and rocks and driftwood into an angry funnel
that dances down the beach and swallows them whole.
Susana smiles in the silence and slowly bends to collect what is left behind.

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  1. neilmacdon says:

    I liked the description of the sea’s treasures (and the fact that the goddess of the seas was called Susana)

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  2. James Pyles says:

    The collector collects the collectors.

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  3. Susana Is quite a stern taskmistress.

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  4. I like your idea of a Goddess with a short and hot temper. We need more badass women in power. Ok, maybe not but, I was amused.

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  5. I’ll think twice the next time I pick up a shell on the beach. =) A very creative story in so few words!

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  6. Wow.. hell hath no fury like a woman who has something stolen! Eh? Well done! ❤

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  7. Alice Audrey says:

    So unfair of her to steal a life for the petty, unwitting theft.

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  8. Iain Kelly says:

    No messing about from Susana, not even a warning! Lovely use of the prompt.

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  9. Guess I’ll have to give up beach combing. It was kind of fruitless here in Arkansas anyway.

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  10. Joy Pixley says:

    You’ve conjured up quite a powerful water goddess there – one that doesn’t put up with strangers stealing her stuff, good for her! I was struggling to see the connection to the photo, though. Were you thinking that the beach is like her museum?

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  11. Dale says:

    She is a tad possessive, is she not? And guess a warning just isn’t strong enough 😉

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  12. draliman says:

    Well, she takes no prisoners! Nice one 🙂

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  13. Delightfully different and a refreshingly different take on the image.

    Click to read my FriFic tale

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  14. Sandra says:

    I can’t help feeling that Susana’s temperament is decidedly ungod-like, but hey, who knows how you’d feel after breaking onto one beach after another for eternity. Pretty vivid imagery here, Alicia – I liked it a lot.

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  15. Dear Lish,

    I like how you went from the art museum to the beach and a testy goddess. Imaginative and well written.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  16. pennygadd51 says:

    Well done for a really original take on the prompt! I think Susana is a very believable goddess. She has a responsibility to look after her patch of coastline, after all – and the power to do so, too. I like your descriptions of the finds made by visitors.

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  17. plaridel says:

    oh my! you can’t mess with a goddess like susana. she has no mercy.

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  18. A vengeful creature here. I’ll send back the broken milk bottle by post. Let the courier take their chances.

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  19. granonine says:

    Lovely picture of exactly what happens on any beach. Except I never before thought of it as stealing 🙂

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  20. gahlearner says:

    Eek, she would have punished me, too. I love to collect stuff on the beach. Great story, Alicia, what a great character Susana is.

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  21. Sarah Ann says:

    Susana’s not having a good day. Loved the excitement of the seekers, and really felt Susana’s upset and anger – great images.

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  22. Oh the rage of a goddess is not something to take lightly… Sad when you don’t know you are breaking the rules.

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  23. StuHN says:

    Really nice take on the prompt. It’s always interesting how we all can interpret the same thing in such different ways.

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  24. Eeeeeekkkkk. Wouldn’t like to encounter her!

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  25. Lynn Love says:

    Love your vengeful goddess – and so many are, or so we’re led to believe. No one sees they’re stealing until it’s too late – but perhaps they’ll learn now she’s shown her power. Beautifully told as always Lish

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  26. kirizar says:

    The sibilant beginning reminded me of the old tongue twister: “She sells seashells by the seashore.”

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